i woke slowly from darkness
i was trapped in an endless cage
there was no way out
i almost gave up
i thought there was nothing to live for
then you called out to me
from your own cage
i knew that
i had to live
for you
i reached out my arm
through my bars
i needed to touch you
even with a shaky hand
but i couldn't tell
through the mist
if you were reaching
for me
i couldn't touch the
solid comfort
of your body
i almost left then
i couldn't take it
then
i heard your voice
softly calling to
me
my heart broke
i knew
that you
needed me
but i wasn't
strong enough
to break my bars
or reach you
there was nothing
i could do
so i still sit here
not knowing
what to do
Author notes
i don't know...i just wrote this cause i was feeling emo and teary. sigh. this is sort of in the same style as the one i just wrote, dying dreamscape. only i like this one better. maybe since i can actually relate to it better, i actually cared about it.
Please tell me what you think
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*sigh* Windy and Rose beat me again! i agree with everything they said. and this poem seems like good therapy for and emo teary mood *hugs*
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me likes. it's cute, in an emo sort of way. if that makes sense. the poem itself wasnt particularly great in my opinion but i like the story it tells.
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for this one i like the feeling more than the actual poem. the poem itself isn't bad, its pretty good, but i can appreciate what your expressing a bit more. your tone is soft and hesitant, perfectly describing your actions in the poem.
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