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Delicate sin



        Wrap me in delicate sin
        and sing me love in
        deep melted chocolate tones,
        that swirl and slip through my sense
        of taste, and moisten my
        lips in honeyed expectation.
        Pressure my body with your
        words, heavy, laden with passion,
        as I seep delicious
        sweet scented coulis
        fresh from a fruit crush heaven.
        Let your tongue sweep
        tenderly in my folds of flesh,
        savour the essence of me,
        gorge yourself,
        on me.

 

 

 

 

 

  

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  • i-will-let-you-be
    April 10, 2007
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    "Wrap me in delicate sin
    and sing me love"

    That is one of the most beautiful phrases I have ever read, and the entire poem was very subtle in how sensual it was. Like others said, it was very tasteful, and I love the way you worded things like "honeyed expectation", they make your senses hunger! Beautiful poem.


  • MysticAngelEyes
    March 24, 2007

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    Wow that is truly erotic nicely written,so delicate and sensual. You put your words together so nicely


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 4, 2007

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    Just beautiful, and soooo sensually written.
    I've never read your work before, but I will
    come back again. This was a great intro to
    your poetry. Love, Lane


  • chester420
    February 4, 2007

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    fine use of words

    yeah i liked this , it was sweet an simple , not too much , ur doing good keep writing , could u comment on sum of mine plz ty


  • Twilight Masquerade
    February 4, 2007

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    I don't like erotica much, but I actually enjoyed this. Very sensual with your use of 'chocolate tones' and 'honeyed expectations'. Great Job.

    ~Snowfall


  • Spiritual Nature
    February 4, 2007
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    Very delicate and sensual. Really loved this one.


  • Aquaqueen
    February 4, 2007
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    sounds pretty sensual to me was a pleasure to read

  • jesselewis
    February 4, 2007
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    applaud

    I'm dying over here.


  • Quiet places
    February 4, 2007
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    Beautiful

    Very clean and tasteful write! Penned to perfection to stimulate the senses yet leave some aspects to the reader's imagination. Perfect! I enjoyed this as for the imagery and emotion that flares up to greet the reader and capture all thought and feelings. Wonderful work, Don


  • Sacrificial Love
    February 4, 2007

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    OH MY!!!!

    This is the most sensual poem I have ever read...

    It is so soft...so beautiful...with the hottest erotic undertones.

    You are an amazing wordsmith...most definitely.

    Sahabah

  • CatrinaRose
    February 3, 2007
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    i really liked it

    wow.. that was a really good poem.. keep up the good work.


  • Fall.Of.Rome
    February 3, 2007
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    Nice...this was excellent, I quite enjoyed it. Very good stuff, keep it up


  • Nanase
    February 3, 2007
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    Really nice poem, I don't usually like erotica but this was very tastefully written

    Rosie x


  • annamoy
    February 3, 2007

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    Tastefully erotic and such a joy to read. The deep pink background goes well too and adds to the fruity, exotic feel of this work! Very nice!
    Good title also.

    Ann


  • swiftkiss
    February 3, 2007
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    Very nice. >_< Anyways that is the perfect title. Thanks for sharing


  • kellih3
    February 3, 2007

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    Very nice poem.
    Its a lot better than some of the erotic writes that I have read. This has more feeling and more creativeness put into it.
    Great job!


  • Isabel Cult
    February 3, 2007
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    That was hot. (I sound like Paris Hilton)


  • Princessdove
    February 3, 2007
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    Wow, nice poem.


  • panegyric ink
    January 27, 2007
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    What can I say? As sensual as it gets.

    I think you have made the entire planet fall in love with you over these sexy thoughts!!!!!


  • jacbgd2 gold member
    January 24, 2007

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    very good

    That poem left me speechless.  All I can say I is "My oh, my oh, my oh, my oh, my..........." I wish my husband was not at work, RIGHT NOW. The message delivered quit vividly. The reader is drawn into every word, as though they were right there. You are a fantastic writer. Keep up the good writing.

  • Colin OBrien
    January 19, 2007
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    Sweet

    Very sweet and tastey...


  • schism06
    January 17, 2007
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    holy shit that was awesome. that truly makes a poem an experience if you've ever had a lover.


  • Floorboards
    January 16, 2007
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    gladly!

    *shivers*, wow jan, i accept your very kind invitation, when's good for you? , this is another excellent poem jan, lovely imagery "fresh from a fruit crush heaven" is wonderful.
    very well done my friend,
    i love it, good luck in the contest,
    alex


  • January 16, 2007

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    Passionate

    Wow Jan, this is indeed a very passionate and deeply sensual Poem . Keep up the great work my friend and best of luck to you in the contest.

    Cheers
    Terry

  • Bad Bill
    January 16, 2007
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    Excellent

    A luscious piece of writing, Sarajane--tasty and tasteful. Mouth-wateringly good.
    Bill


  • leo2
    January 16, 2007
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    Yumm yumm. Now this is the type of erotica you can sink your teeth into and return for seconds. Delicious words in a elegant setting. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long
    ps. Here's my rsvp.


  • individuality gold member
    January 16, 2007

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    oh, if you insist, i will just get a napkin i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • Phed
    January 16, 2007
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    *blush*

    Wow! I like that!

    Then i'm just a sucker for sensual/erotic poetry.

    You have such a beautiful subtle flow to your poetry. I'm also thrilled with your vocabulary... you use such tastey words!

    Keep on writing

    xXx
    Phed


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    January 16, 2007
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    Thankyou for your beautifully worded submittal, a class act in every aspect, Bella

  • Uriah Hamilton
    January 15, 2007

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    Tasty

    Really loved the phrase "fruit crush heaven". By all means a very tasty and inviting poem!!
    Uriah


  • laughingstock
    January 15, 2007
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    My stars, Sarajane, you do that so well. Luscious is a great way to describe the words you use. To create a tasteful presentation of ideas in such a way that MY mouth was watering. That's something to be impressed by. Very nice writing.

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