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Music of Regret

music
turning
to desire
turning
to whispers
turning
to tears

staining
the beauty
of harmony

longing
for the perfect
song
the heart cries
in B flat

that lonely
chamber
of regret

myra




Author notes

For you, Artis - for inspiring me.

I've written a vertical poem to illustrate the oneness in its solitude.
Written June 3rd, 2003

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    June 19, 2003
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    ohhh wow! I love this, very beautiful and very deep. It hold much power in this for so few words. It made a terrific impact on me. Great job on this. Blessed be


  • dittysri silver member
    June 15, 2003
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    Subtile but Excellent

    Love it. I love music and all the emotions that it can release. With few words you express multitudes on emotions one cascading upon another. Bravo.


  • Danna Hobart
    June 14, 2003
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    Regret... you know what I regret the most? The times I stood by and did nothing. If we don't do anything, we will never make a difference.

    I love the illistration of isolation here...

    a single
    strand
    can only
    one note
    relay

    Thanks so much for your comment on my newest chapter. Over half way done with my novel now.


  • myrataal silver member
    June 11, 2003
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    Thank you, Jani, for reading and commenting ...


  • June 11, 2003
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    The vertical style you have used here to illistrate the oneness in it's solitude is a wonderful idea myrataal, emphasizing too, the pain and your beautiful use of metaphor is very clever.
    This is a wonderful write.
    Jani


  • myrataal silver member
    June 7, 2003
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    Thank you, Poet friends, for commenting on my work. I appreciate every word sincerely.


  • Sprite silver member
    June 7, 2003
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    The shape could also simulate the streak a tear makes as it travels down a cheek. I especially like the tracing of the mood as the poem drops like liquid.


  • rite
    June 7, 2003
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    You truly are a muse! Divinity communicates through poetry and music and some of us can actually hear it. I enjoyed reading! Take care,

    Rage


  • gecko
    June 4, 2003
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    Excellent

    tis stunning lady Myra
    with its mood changing through its length
    beautifuly done dear one


  • artis
    June 3, 2003
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    Thanks ever so much for sharing your inspiration with my name....you have a gift and to be included on the tag is wonderful....music is an old friend and I love they way it can change moods and add mood to changes.....Artis


  • ferg silver member
    June 3, 2003
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    Wow Myra! What an eloquent and apropos musical metaphor you've created here. Resonates right to my core. Deep stuff. Yes...

    Henri

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