All was Taken, and I was left behind
family, friends, loved ones and my home.
All Taken by a storm of destruction,
it engulfed me like no other.
All meaning of life was gone
I had been drained, my soul was sucked
right out of me, the darkness crawled in,
All my hopes and dreams disappeared.
Then the hauntings began, hearing only
loud screams, crys, and laughter, then the
silence would fall, Demons were all around
I was chained and bound to my addictions.
Insanity sets in, I feel the grip of the
Devil himself, more pain, sorrows, rage
and fear, behind a wall of emptiness,
Lies and confusion is all I had left.
Broken, beaten, lonely and lost in pain,
I had been Taken by Crack Cocaine
trapped inside deep depression
I was left behind.
No longer chained and bound
I'm picking up the pieces
today I am free, I'm finding some peace
I've Taken back my life.
Author notes
Option 4 & 5
My Addictions run deep and Bi-Polor Depression layed on top of that...BUT
Recovery is possible...I'm living proof
~~A whole person is one who has both
walked with God and wrestled with the devil...
A contest entry
- emotion emotion emotion...{{1000points!!}} by XInsanity-FairX.
1000 points, ended October 7, 2007, 63 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - be dark and emotinal by darkangel-darksoul.
300 points, ended December 20, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Lol, dang now I can't remember what that wicked idea is!
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Wow I love it! Such a relevant topic for today, so many people are struggling with so many diseases (hard to prevent) and with so many addictions (hard to avoid at times) that proof of a re-newed life is possible for everyone. You just gave me a wicked idea for a poem or contest... Thanks and good luck!
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Hmmm... I don't know if it goes EXACTLY with the option, but it was alright actually. Better than others I've read. I like how this builds up like a story.... Conflict, climax and resolution... nice work and good luck in my contest.
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Very inspiratinal thank you for sharing!
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Raw honesty is hard to find sometimes, and even more difficult to write, but I felt it in every word you wrote here. Most interesting to me is the perspective this is written in...that you see it as "they" were taken away from you instead of you being the one to journey away from them. I questioned that until I realized there is a truth here I almost missed; that addiction binds a person to one place in time, where they are unable to truly move forward with their life. (My take on it anyway.) You take your reader from despair to grace, and weakness to strength. Beautiful.
I can relate to so many of the feelings you've described here, even without being addicted to anything. It's hard for me to even imagine how much worse it could be with the additional stress of being Bi-Polar. I love stories of people who have found their inner strength to fight the darkness and win. You poem has touched me deeply, and I thank you for sharing it...
s
~J.
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Great Job!
Wow, this was really amazing. Thank you for such raw honesty; I think it will help a lot of people, including me, to know that recovery from addiction and mental illness is possible. Either one is tough, but both together . . . why do they so often go hand in hand? You touched on that briefly here and it was well done, just enough to question. The only critique that I have is that, in the fourth stanza, there is both past and present tense. I don't know if that was intentional or not. Other than that, this was really amazing, such an emotional journey you've taken us on.
Thanks for entering!
***Rae*** -
here are three more
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Drugs are demons that tell the lies, and keep one bound. I give you 3 applauds for being free. and three more for the wonderful write..
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I hardly know where you have been, even though your words are fearfully and painfully very clear, these are just the words the pain (Thankfully )I could never know, A powerful write. God bless,
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Empathise with every word.
This is my story too! Need I say more? Well yes heheh Brilliantly done. You show that evil is real and I hope someone realises it through this.
Love, light & peace
Georgia -
Very Good
Well said in words
You are blessed to be free
I am proude of you
Great ending in all ways
No longer chained and bound
I'm picking up the pieces
today I am free, I'm finding some peace
I've Taken back my life.
Rick
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Is that Rukia-san
Ahhh I am a very Bleach fan if that made sense.
Anyway, this was a good display of defeat, and dark aftermath.
And at the end, hope finds the will to stand even amid the dry landscape of futility and agony.
Well done,
RD.
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Wow! Wow!
such a deep poem starts out so sad then i love the ending i love that you were able to pick yourself up and take your life back and be incontrol.So yeah awsome poem...love this part...
"Broken, beaten, lonely and lost in pain,
I had been Taken by Crack Cocaine
trapped inside depression
I was left behind.
No longer chained and bound
I'm picking up the pieces
today I am free, I'm finding some peace
I've Taken back my life. "
Jammi
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A dark, deep poem you have written.... you have looked with in your soul, and faced, the broken road you have walked... You open your eyes to addiction, that captures a person, to escape reality...
You express your emotions well from a sad, deep hole, giving an insight of pain, and been alone....
To the rising of your soul, the rebirth of a life, a new road to travel with yourself in control...
a darkened past to leave behind, a golden journey awaits
good luck in the contest
Tracey
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Praise God
Praise God my friend. This is a wonderful poem of How God brought you out. I like the part I am taking back my life. Yes, we must take back what the Devil has stole from us, through faith in the Cross of Christ Jesus. Thank you wonderful write. I love it so very much. God bless you my friend. Keep penning for Christ Jesus.
Tabitha
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this is wonderful!!! very great write!!!
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Outstanding
Great write Blondone, the entire poem is strong, good imagery, good content. Good luck in the contest
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