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My Bride

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My Bride

Looking out across the bow, I see my bride
In all her splendor she crashes on my side
Older than I, yet I love her majestic charms
When I was born she cradled me in her arms
I am older now with weather beaten planks
She has never aged, for this I give my thanks
I have seen her lay still, calm as a mirror glass
I have seen her rage and tug my ropes on brass
I know some day my time will come
When all my sailing days are done
I will sink to a watery grave
Yet still in her arms and feeling brave
I
am
The sturdiest ship in the fleet, safe in the arms of my sweet.
So when you speak of my bride, she carries me on her tide
The love she gives to me, my lady love the sea
Just a simple boat, she keeps me afloat

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Shape poem in the shape of a boat.

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  • LongPatrol
    September 13, 2008

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    Nice imagination. But who's the bride? The ship or the lady on the ship? I just didn't quite grasp it yet. But good write, still.
    -LongPatrol


    • Amera gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      There is no lady on the ship. The bride is the sea.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    January 31, 2008

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    Beautiful my new friend beautiful, combining love,the sea and boat so very well.. The shape worked well for me.But mostly I loved the beautiful imagery in this one


    Cindy


  • samara11278
    October 15, 2007
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    This is beautiful.
    I love that you personified the sea.
    Great job!
    : )


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 18, 2007

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    Well done! As lovely as the shape of your poem is , I love the extended metaphor even better! An well done rhyme to boot!

    I throw roses at your feat!


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 28, 2007

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    When I read the title thought I'd see a bride shaped poem - like this boat shaped one too. Must take some doing and tinkering around to get it just right.


  • Manoura xx
    January 24, 2007

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    nice!!!!!!how did you make it lyk that/??how did you get it exactly right???i cant do that...!!!!great job though...WONDERFUL!!!!!!!!!!BYE!!!!!!!!!


  • January 20, 2007
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    So Beautiful!!!

    I want to sail away!

  • MovieFan
    January 15, 2007
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    This is a really great poem. The shape of the boat is what really made this poem good. Good work.

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