Someone stole
the mold of humanform
the color that binds
a rainbow white-out
the smell of the south
mixed with Arian sweat
the countries invade
the rights, yet add
them to their credits
zebras in slanted paths
stomp glowing sand worms
who can't forget to look up.
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Illustrator- Korinne -5 years old.
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you did it nanah love korinne your dorter
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Cool.
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we love it!
For all of the arts and zebra lovers here, who may also care about arts education for kids, I'd like to introduce you to The Dreaming Zebra Foundation.
We are a non-for profit charity dedicating to keeping art and music in the nation's poorest schools. One of the ways we raise money is through the sale of various artworks; I hope that you will take a moment to visit the following link and few Joan Hansen's "Colors of the Wild".
http://www.zebracreations.com/Joan_Hansen.html
This beautiful zebra-themed work, along with our charity bracelets, help us enormously to raise money to help the children; you can learn more about us by visiting this link as well. We hope that you will stop by, and also tell your friends.
http://www.zebracreations.com/dreaming.html
We are always in need of used or new art supplies as donations as well. Thanks for helping us make a difference. -
from alyssa~~ your niece
i think this shows alot of effort.i love the expression.you fill in every single detail a poem could have.what ever your doing keep it up.you are an
insperation to little ears.i wish everyone could
have the talent you discribe.it's not just this poem it's the person who wrote it.korrine i love your illustrations.i think korrine should write a book about her true beauty of coloring,and about her connection to poetry.
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hehe very cute story, written briefly and significantly. May the color and form never be stolen or lost, for I like having both in my world
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
YOU HAVE JUST BEEN HOODWINKED
; Courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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Hoodwinked!
I think this is a great poem and it is written well. You have grade A writing quality. The content I think is a bit over my head. I'm off to read another. -
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Another great poem! It shows a lot of mystery in its origin, but still finishes off very well.
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the imagery is good and the poem is..what's the word for it? ...interesting.
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powerfuly creative
This is a very vivid vision throughout time; I rode the carousel 3 times and didn’t mind the hourglass of time. Marvelous imagery of zebra! salute -
Very nice job saying so much with so little...Very nice!
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Dianne, this is an interesting poem. Korinne, you did a wonderful job on the zebra..it's a funky, funky, Zebra.
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Darling niece? ...'that you?
Ohhhhhhhhh..terrific. I'm so glad you registered
to leave a comment. K will be tickled you saw
her illustration.
That's what was most important from my kin.
Bless you so much!
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first thought this was about racial tension, but now I'm not so sure. some poet here once said to me, there's a fine line between making a reader earn her dinner, and starving her to death. Interesting images, and word choice nevertheless.
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Hmmmmmmmmm..Interesting statement. Thank you. Guess I wasn't doing either, but offering appertifs..
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I'd be interested to know what YOUR meaning is behind this. Everyone's would be different, of course, but I'm curious about some of your word choices...what was the picture in your head when you wrote these words?
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universal tensions
Hi. Thank you so much. I use to ask those whose words were so vague the same reasons. I use hyperboles..have a fettish
for it because poetry transcends and grows, has relevation as well as REVelation.
So my purpose was to illustrate the universal tensions,
both cultural, racial, governmental and religious. A wild animal whose direction is not above the lowliest beneath our soils. Some give a grim view of the actions of the perpetrators are the very ones who think
that it will credit them in spite of the hard labor of most. Hope that helps!
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Good
I know this is off subject, but I love zebras. Anyway about the poem
, I think it has good imagery, and I like the last line..
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Stripped to soul ...
and skinned to minimalistic reflections. A stark poem, addressing society with a voice of sadness and of reprimand. Vivid in its picturesque naturality, making the topic part of creation's horizontal perspective. Brilliant!
Love to you my Beloved Friend.
Myra
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Very interesting write...
This is a really metaphorical piece. I got flavours of invasion and empire, with the idea of so-called 'moral' countries benefitting, through debt and alliegences:
'the countries invade
the rights, but add
us to their credits'.
It is a highly ambiguous piece, and all the more fascinating for it.
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Cookie, This was a bit over my head but ill come back to it and see if I can figure it out later on. I think a gifted child would catch on to this who has more of a understanding to your genius out stretched creativity and mind set. Doesn't take away from your poetry just because I don't catch on to always its meaning. You know you have the education to be good at what you do.
Love,Me
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