I know you were here,
because my life
has been forever changed
Wonderful nights dancing
under the moon.
Sensual mornings
feeling the sun
make love with us
Kisses filled with passion,
fingertips on fire
You are gone now
My dreams scattered among
the ruins of my heart
Flashes of your face
appear from nowhere,
startling me back into reality
Our times together pierce my brain,
as I try to make a lasting picture
A memory here, a memory there
It won't come together
no matter how I try
I reluctantly accept the fact that
things are as they should be
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Look in side yourself - Tell me what you See!!!!! by troyias.
600 points, ended January 25, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I can relate to this poem so much right now! It's so hard to let go and move on after you've have someone in your life that has changed it so much. It really makes you stop and wonder how you were living prior to them coming into your life. It's as if they showed light into a darken place that you never knew was dark until the enter your life. This is such an amazing penned poem. You've penned it with so many vivid and real emotions. It really speaks to the readers hearts. Nicely done!
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Sad
a lovely write. full of emotion and imagery. Rich in it's flow and rhythem. Beautiful in it's sadness.
thank you for entering this contest. Good Luck
*Go wirh God*
Valerie
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Sad poem about the loss of someone and i can feel the pain in this poem...wounderful flow to your words and good description to them..
"Wonderful nights dancing
under the moon.
Sensual mornings
feeling the sun
make love with us
Kisses filled with passion,
fingertips on fire"
Jammi
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This reflects feelings of such pain and loss. You have penned it well. These pics are bringing out so much talent. Best wishes in the contest!
Blessings,
Frogz~ -
amazing ... it reminds me of recent events in my own life, that have left me reflecting and trying to peice back together the memories. i love the word choice and it has a nice solid structure.
keep it up
Diary
P.S. thanks for the comments
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*beautiful
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this was a beaytiful poem, The last line seemed filled with lonliness
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Wondeful piece. You have penned much pain and loss in this piece. Your words cry of lonliness and sorrow. You did a beautiful job.
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Beautiful words
Those that come to us in moonlit serenade
Those that become the sun's glimmer in our hearts
That become at times the clouds of disdain
Are like the the bristles of the painters brush
Individually leaving their mark
Creating human masterpieces
Of love and loss and new found ideals and dreams
In that if such things never occurred
We would be but mere blank canvasses
Stark and white in framed encarceration
Such heartfelt compelling word you have penned here, well done Bravo
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Oh geez....yes, I try so hard to bring that face to clear view..you know, I can't any more..it is vague shapes and almost there....I stopped trying..I simply take the abstract shapes and apply the memory to it.
Whew, good one.
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