Though many miles away
Your eyes gaze deeply into my soul
Knowing all my inner mysteries
Your warm breath on my neck thaws my inhibition away
Filling me with passion, peace, and confidence;
A joyous inner glow.
Just as the sun melts away the icy winter frost
Spring’s sweet deliverance
After many months of snow
Filled with deep understanding
Your eyes bring me to life
Disarming my inner cynic
Who whispers incessantly
About love’s slim possibility
Convincing me that love is a deep beautiful crystalline pool
And that I am a bird
Native to air;
Never water.
That glimmer in your eyes transforms me
Sweeping me off to a new unknown element.
Give me gills
So I may dive into your world
And dance together in love’s depths
Some days I imagine
Our lips interlocking
Releasing sparks
As fireworks bloom inside us
My spine tingles
My body immobilized with shivers
A mystical feeling overtakes me
Indescribable
But intense;
Unforgettable.
Though lost in a beautiful dream
I do not know what our future holds
Though I feel more awake than ever
We are many miles away
But nothing can stop my heart from dreaming
Or snatch away this powerful feeling
For my heart's murmurs today
Are simply unforgettable
Perhaps one day
The wind will bring
Our paths together
Our bodies interlock
Our souls merge
As we embrace
And I discover
My missing puzzle piece
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© Jan 2007 ~Ilana Cofield~
Author notes
A whimsical poem about soul mates from the depths of my imagination. Part fantasy, part feelings, part personal.
I believe that soul mates are like puzzle pieces: each completing each other with something they lack to form a beautiful complete pictures.
When growing up, I always wondered what would happen if your missing puzzle piece happened to live far away. What if you never discovered each other.
In love, my inner cynic has always had a great hold on me and has built walls around my romantic heart and soul. I've always felt that love was a beautiful thing but in some incompatible element. The inner cynic is a powerful stubborn little fellow, but on occasion real love can disarm him.
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- Online Love by cirrusfire.
600 points, ended February 1, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want to Feel The Fiery Passion by EternalFyre.
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Comments
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Excellent
That is two very gifted works in a row
I will add you to my favorites
Wonderfull crafting of words
Like this and more
Though lost in a beautiful dream
I do not know what our future holds
Though I feel more awake than ever
We are many miles away
But nothing can stop my heart from dreaming
Or snatch away this powerful feeling
For my heart's murmurs today
Are simply unforgettable
Read "My Secret Heaven" on my authors page
Beautiful
Rick
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awesome!
That is simply beautiful! The ending is stellar. Your words are so genuine. You style is unique and inspiring.
The "give me gills..." line is nothing short of brilliant! Thank you once again for a splendid read,
Kj
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This was a beautiful poem, I really connected well with the words possibly because I really relate well to it. Good luck in the contest!
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What an excellent title to a poem on love. Your words are filled with hope and longing and helped paint a beautiful picture in my mind's eye. Wonderful writing, best of luck in the contests.
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great rite!!! I love reading poems like that! the words just flow perfectly! I love the way you call your love your "missing puzzle piece" great use of a metaphor!
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....it's all great. there is a depth and undertone to this that goes and flows excellently. keep writing......you have a lot to offer. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways. You rock....
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This is amazing... I love how you use the metaphors to describe your unsurpassed passion and love for someone. The immense feeling just burst out into the writing. All I can say is... Wow...
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Thank you for your sweet comment. Poetry is just perfect for all the intense feelings I feel with this.
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Imaginative...
A poem which comes more from the nebulousness of dreams, in that dreams cannot hurt you unless you try to realise them. There is perfection in your poem...But know, thast should you find the missing piece and complete the picture, then the picture becomes as a flat board, in two-dimensions... PA.
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Yes, our journey to realize them can be painful and sadly sometimes deceptive. But unrealized, they ache even more and we are left wondering what could have been. I do believe each of us has a missing puzzle piece somewhere out there but we have to search through so many ill fits before finding it.
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I love the "disarming my inner cynic" line. Your words are musical and well placed. The emotion is apparant and you give us some great imagery.
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed.
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Moonlit
This is very passionate, loving and wonderful to read !
Absolutely perfect for anyone in a long-distance love ...
Your words touched me deep in the heart as they floated down the page calmly
Beauutiful write
I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Thank you so much and I'm glad you could relate to it. Long distance love is challenging in so many ways, but the feeling is still so intense.
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Brilliant!
WOW, this is a sensational write
Your words went straight to my heart. Words that are so emotional and sensual about a love many miles away.
I have a long distance love so your poem showed the feelings that I have inside. We are longing to join as one someday.
The following verses are absolutly perfect
"We are many miles away
But nothing can stop my heart from dreaming
Or snatch away this powerful feeling
For my hearts murmurs today
Are simply unforgettable
Perhaps one day
The wind will bring
Our paths together
Our bodies interlock
As we embrace
And I discover
My missing puzzle piece"
I consider not being with my love as and empty whole that needs to be filled--this whole is "my missing puzzle piece" I must link you poem to my love. I know that she will love it as well. I'm glad to finally have a chance to read some of your writes. You are a brilliant poet.
Much Love
Bo
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Thank you so much for your kind comment. Best wishes with your long distance love. People sometimes tell me that I'm too much of a dreamer with distance love, but when there's someone tremendously special and there's mutual longing, a way to come together emerges.
I hope she enjoys the poem
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What a great metaphor you usee throughout this poem - the missing puzzle piece. I am working on 1000 piece puzzle now, after having just completed one, adn how frustrating it is to have one missing at the end when you have worked so hard to finish it - it is not complete when a piece is missing. Liked the missing link and the interlocking parts - great wrtie,
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So true. There's this gap of emptiness in the picture and when you do find that one piece, it feels so good.
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!!!! this is firey passion, but also sweet and gentle...I love the phrase "disarming my inner cynic" because its something i wish i could do...and i think, now,(thanks to you) that someday i might too find my missing puzzle piece
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I'm glad you enjoyed and that this inspired you. I'll tell you that inner cynic is pretty stubborn. He keeps fighting and whispering. I'm still struggling with him but we must fight him again and again until love triumphs. Best wishes to you.
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