Nobody can prepare you for how pain feels
Your tears pouring like rain drops just
dripping
and dripping
and dripping
Forming a puddle of depression and despair
The never ending battle of your emotions
Happiness v.s. Sorrow
The taste of the horrible words you say
To loved ones to make them feel your pain
Your heart is no longer a warm loving object
But an iceberg full of hate
For the ones you love most
The sound of your family members weeping
Because of you
It's a horrible sight but like I said
NOBODY CAN PREPARE YOU FOR PAIN
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
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i truly agree that no one can prepare you for pain..good poem
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i just noticed that you did not follow a rule please fix this or you will be removed
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its true no one can..very true poem but i dont know if its...dark. either way its a great poem
thx for entering my contest
~marin~ -
I wholeheartedly agree with your last line - there's indeed nobody that can prepare you for the pain you have to deal with. A very well written poem!
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really good it great and i like it alot
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hey thanks for entering my contest although as Lone Defender pointed out you didnt follow my rules either... although i'm giving you the chance to fix it place your option # in the authors notes and you'll be set! I loved your poem so good luck and keep up the good work
~tearstaindangel~ -
Hello, and thanks for entering my contest.
I did notice, though, that this poem does not rhyme. That was part of my rules. Also, the option you chose is not noted in your author's notes.
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thank you for entering!
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Hmm... I really like the concept for this piece.
How do you describe pain? Thinking about it, it's a little bit impossible. However, you certainly did a fantastic job trying.
I'm not sure about the emphasis on the last line, I agree it needs some sort of emphasis but I'm not sure if that's it.
However, it does it's job and really makes you look at the line so I suppose that's all you can really ask for.
Thankyou for a thought provoking write
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I guess the pain cannot be fully described in true words and that is why we have to experience it for ourselves. Too bad for that! I would have love to side-step some of the pain in my life. A very relatable poem here. Keep them flowing…Cotton
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this is tuff im feeling it u good talent welcome to AP looking forward o more of your work
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I like this poem. It made me gasp alot. Your right no one prepares you for pain. I defienlty like the metaphor you used in this...thanks for entering my contest. I will be rereading the poems before I judge them.
alwaysalone0 -
nice...u destroyed that...i loved it...no1 can prepare you for pain...every1 learns...and you cant learn it till youve experianced it...nice job...welcome 2 AP
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Awesome
You captured this topic very well.. And well Come To AllPoetry
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Welcome to Allpoetry!
You have certainly captured the depth and intensity os some sad emotions here. I appreciate the opportunity to savor your work here at Allpoetry. Welcome aboard! I encourage you to wander around and become familiar with all the wonderful features we have here. There are also many writing groups and contests and even online classes that you can become a part of here. If you have any questions, please don’t hesitate to contact any greeter online!
♥ Touchof1der
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