Close Isn't Close Enough by freespirit51 at All poetry

As man and wife,

We lay here together.

Face to face,

Side by side.

Our naked bodies,

Mirrored each other.

Words of love spoken,

Loving kisses shared.

Gently caressing,

The tender love we made.

But no matter

How much we hold

One another close,

Sometimes close,

Just isn’t close enough.

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ImmaculateDesire
January 20, 2007

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This is so sensual but true. Intimacy is a state of mind for me. It is so important to bond with someone entirely. If your heart is not in it, then you will never feel really close. I can relate to your feelings when you wrote this. It is so true, but sad at times. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing it with me. Take care.
The Vulture
January 16, 2007

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really hit the target
wow, short but I love it. The last title/last line really ties the whole poem very well together. Sometimes close, Just isn't close enough... AHhh I love it! But it really kills my hope for lasting love though. lol Nevertheless, thank you so much for entering my contest and letting me enjoy this great piece. =)
Shadow Lynx
January 15, 2007

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Excellent write !Soft sensual tone,the sweet aura of love between two people,quite beautifully penned.Do i detect a hint of sadness in the last line? Great write!!
Soulful Woman
January 14, 2007

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Oh wow...I know this feeling oh so well. You just want to crawl inside that other persons skin..sounds crazy but I have been there. Wonderful piece.
Soulful Woman
kennybaby05
January 14, 2007

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Wonderful
First i just need to say that the picture just COMPLETES this poem! I mean yes, granted this is a great poem, but that picture...man it's amamzing what they can do for some works.
But enough about that, I really enjoyed this poem. It's short, its bittersweet, and straight to the point. And I'd have to say that I totally agree with this. Not everyone in the world will have that complete connection with someone, though we may wish it was always there.
Great write! I loved reading it!
OurxBeginning
January 14, 2007

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Very beautiful and sensual. I loved the picture that went with this. Short but really sweet write. Well done and keep it up.
wbiro
January 14, 2007
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short and to the point! Now considering the picture, I'd have ruined the piece by lecturing on getting married too young! or worse, fooling around before marriage! A good artist knows when to stop, they say...
Cannonsfire
January 14, 2007
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Lovely wistful penning, images of sometimes a love not being enough, to just give yourself is only half of what makes love whole, trust, respect and friendship must also come into the equasion. Nicely put.
ParadiseSeeker
January 14, 2007

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OMG, i love this poem! i feel you 100%! i love the pic too, it goes very well with the poem. i am very happy for you!
Broken Memory
January 14, 2007
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Beautiful. : )
Look forward to more of your poems. : )
OhSusannah
January 14, 2007
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New love, a new life together... this is beautiful
Broken Memory
January 14, 2007
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Bravo
I like it, it's "loving". There is one thing I don't like that much.
The line "Gently touching each other" To me, it doesn't really flow with the rest. I would use something that would allow a smooth picture.
something like "We caress each other" it kind of adds to the loving feel.
Guenevyre
January 14, 2007

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Great!
I am somewhat speechless...very well written. You bring about such emotion with your wording. Great Poem!