Bereshit
...and the land was without form and barren and thirsty...
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When the first seed found its nest
it grew into an apple tree...
and when the first ripe apple
split away from the tree
it broke into two equal parts.
Who are you? The first qestion
from the first man
to the new creation on his land.
She smiled, blushing, taking a leave
to cover her beauty.
I am woman.
Are you?...What?...
No, I am woman.
What are you doing in my apple?
I was just born. And what are you doing in my apple?
He started to lick his lips because of the fresh apple juice
and he became more and more thirsty.
I am dizzy, he said.
Are you going to die?
Yes...
and she dug a deep hole in the earth
and she planted her tears one by one
and the hard stone was broken by their salt
and a new spring came out
to quench their thirst,
and it showered the skies
and fell back to Earth
flowing like a new river
and a new love was born.
Author notes
Bereshit (Genesis)
1:2 The earth was without form and empty, with darkness on the face of the depths, but God's spirit moved on the water's surface.
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Superb
The poem clearly picturises the creation and Love sprung between Man and Woman. Enjoyed a lot.. This recalls me the epic "Paradise Lost", by John Milton. The thirst and lust are shown in the lines
"He started to lick his lips because of the fresh apple juice
and he became more and more thirsty."
The Last Line of the poem saya about the Generation of Man in crispy and simple words..Good Luck in the contest!
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Thank you very much for reading my poetry and for so nice comment.
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A very interesting a lovely take on the beginnings of man and woman. You would prob find the lyrics to "The Origin of Love" from the musical movie Hedwig and the Angry Inch really beautiful- I love it's take on the seperation of the two halves. Thanks for the lovely read!
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A very nice and spiritual write my friend. I love the way you put your words together. It is so refreshing. Good luck in this contest.
Jim
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Thank you Jim. Actually, contest is over but I am satisfied.
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Firstly I would like to thank you for entering...
You have created a unique poem here...
A story written with poetic art,
Your first line
'...and the land was without form and barren and thirsty...'
creates the atmosphere, draws the reader in...
I love this line, the imagery is brillant
What are you doing in my apple?
I was just born. And what are you doing in my apple?
He started to lick his lips because of the fresh apple juice
and he became more and more thirsty.
Your imagination is wonderful
Goodluck in the contest
Tracey
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Thank you Tracey for this contest and chance to be a part of it.
I like to write about nature and its all beauty. Sometimes my imagination do not recognize any borders and then you can find this kind of poetry on my site.
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The imagery and the feel of your poem is nothing short of incredable. I loved how the story unfolded before me. I have always loved reading your poetry and then reflecting upon each of them as I always find something extraa special within each of them.
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Dear friend, I am glad that you like my poetic expressions and paintings. Yes, you are right, it is always something special within each of my poem
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Fabulous!
Sonja, now 'that' is what one calls original!
and she dug a deep hole in the earth
and she planted her tears one by one
and the hard stone was broken by their salt
and a new spring came out
to quench their thirst,
and it showered the skies
and fell back to Earth
flowing like a new river
and a new love was born.
yeah, I just really loved that part. This poem and the picture would make a fabulous poster for a church or poem festival!
JD
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Thanks you dear friend for your so great comment/rating of my poetry.
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the image you decorate your write with is as powerful as it is soft, same as the message running through the poem, re-creating a world with the powerful eyesight of an artist living her heart into her poetry. the motif of genesis is impressing and impressive.
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Today my muse whispered to me something interesting about God's creation, but my poem was almost finished and I don't want to change my own opinion although my muse interpretation was much softer. I know that my poem turned up side down everything known from Bible and I hope that people will not hate me because of my poetic interpretation. I do not have any pretensions to touch and to change Genesis. Thank you for your comment and for your precious time you spent to read my poetry.
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