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Explain Me

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Oh, my lover's lips,
staring at my world like

champagne and the coming of lavender.


Expressively precise in color
exactly empty of effort,
imperfect, even prayerfully undeserving when alone.


yet when together,

slowly rising towards my poet kisses like supple, drowsy twin suns,
ready to play waterway winds

of springs' delicate
explanation.

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  • PurringKitten silver member
    July 2, 2008

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    BREATH TAKING

    as your words flow across the tongue I am reminded of a sweet red wine...passion tender, complete surrender...your words i do believe take my breath away thank you kind sir for sharing them with me


    • Timothy Cameron gold member
      July 2, 2008
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      Explain Me

      I enjoy rereading this one. It makes me feel as if I'm there. It has layers, like most goodthings. Glad it brought you an awareness of surrender. Poems should fully immerse the reader. I'm honored at your comment. Thank you.


  • raggyann
    December 27, 2007
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    this is beautiful
    your words were captivating


  • Gwenevere
    December 22, 2007
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    Beautiful

    This was beautiful.I cannot say more,
    Ros


  • mad hattie
    January 25, 2007

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    wow, like being wrapped up in a soft blanket warm and fresh from the dryer...added warmth to my morning. well articulated, and crafted.

    • Timothy Cameron gold member
      January 25, 2007
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      right before, "ready to play", I was tempted to write,
      sweetest music, hips lift a loving kiss",
      waterway...
      but I didn't want to limit the poem. I wanted it to mean all it could mean...


  • poetryality silver member
    January 16, 2007
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    My first impression is ~sigh~

    This is elegant. I have never seen it written this way when it comes to describing lips. I wonder what intention God had when he made them? Especially as they are wondrous for kissing. Ah! Again, I sigh. Simply beautiful!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • sidewinder silver member
    January 15, 2007

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    romance found in that brief bit of time
    where memories rise within an echo
    delicate notes sung in the wind...
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    January 14, 2007

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    Oh My

    No explanation needed! This is truly a beautiful piece. How delicate a way you weave the words of unite. Well done. ~Pam


  • Trellis
    January 14, 2007

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    Sweet!

    I love poems about kisses - and they must be brief like this. This is perfect. You've gotten quite creative here, Tim - but I'm not surpised. Your work is always exceptional.

    Cris


  • joshuap
    January 14, 2007

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    Wow.........this is too good.I just loved this write.My friend,you have written a great poem.Hats off to you for your talent.

    God Bless You
    Josh

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