Her brown hair is matted tangles
Her clothes are raggedly worn,
Her body smeared with grime
Is diminished and forlorn.
She looks at me with glazed eyes-
Eyes that scream out 'used',
Revealing her soul as torn
Shattered and achingly bruised.
She reaches out a shaking hand,
Her body quakes with need-
For the familar slip of the needle
That causes her to beg and plead.
I take her hand in mine,
I see beauty beneath her skin.
I ache to touch her soul,
To swallow up her sin.
The tears begin to fall,
Her grip tightens on my hand.
She shares her pain, her sorrow,
She needs me to under-stand.
I hold her until it passes-
This devil's demand.
She thristily drinks my strength,
I feel my emptiness expand.
Author notes
Hold On, option #2
A contest entry
- Take My Hand by x Gemini x.
600 points, ended January 26, 2007, 27 entries
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great write. very intense, i love the emotion and struggle that shows through. i have been lucky in never knowing anyone who went through such hell. thanks for sharing. blessed be.
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In your work you do great things. In the rotten society of today many are forced to face problems they are unable to handle by themselves. To think that the CIA earns 300 million USD of black money annually in the poppy fields of Afghanistan, which is why the US told the world Bin Laden fled there, and fought the Taliban that burned the fields for religious reasons, after they were initially trained and armed by the US to drive out the Russians, while at home in the US part of a generation is destroyed by heroin. How treacherous can a society become? I applaud you for just giving help to those who need it badly, not caring about the filthy dealings behind the scenes. I enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for creating and sharing and good luck in the contest. Take care,
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First, let me thank you for entering my contest.
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This poem was very touching. Creative perspective. The flow and imagery was very well done. Easily realted to. -
Wow, this is a very strong write here. I really enjoyed the message that was portrayed throughout the poem and the scene was easily seen thanks to your descriptive word usage. Definately a good write and good luck in the contest.
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