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Slow motion

  Slow motion

  Next to the cold wall
  made of glass and metal
  supporting the stone
  with my back
  fearing the world would break
  if you do not come.
  Or was the stone
  supporting me?

  Waiting.
  My small fists like frigtened animals
  looking for shelter
  in the pockets.

  With each of the door's swooshhh
  my eyes blink
  in slow motion
  ...looking for you.
 
  Faces, eyes of millions of strangers
  before the objective of my eyes.
  Steps' echoes,
  speaker's voices above my head,
  numbers and names,
  numbers and names...
  like some strange game.

  Then, with only one
  snapshot of my heart
  I trap the light from your eyes
  and I see
  you

  framed with my love.

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Painitng by Alfred Gockel

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  • Danna Hobart
    October 1, 2007
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    I liked this one even better the second time I read it.


  • Myjoy gold member
    February 5, 2007
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    A true romantic are'nt you. I love this peom the visuals are so great. Love touchs it through.


    • Sonja
      February 6, 2007
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      Yes, you are right, I am very romantic.


  • Wandika gold member
    January 17, 2007

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    Very nice

    Sonja, you are a very romantic devil I would say. This is so lovely. Your gentleness shines through.

    Jim

    • Sonja
      January 18, 2007
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      Devil? Why devil? lol, I am just a woman, somebody said fairy too, lol... yes, I am very romantic person Jim, maybe too much, but what's realy too much? Sometimes I could surprises myself too. I am glad that you can see me into the right "light"
      ~Sonja~

  • mimiagatha
    January 16, 2007

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    incredibly realistic, complex, and creating an atmosphere of pure tension and final delight. a real treat to the eyes


    • Sonja
      January 16, 2007
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      Yes, you are right, very realistic.Thank you for applauses
      ~Sonja~


  • JohnnyD gold member
    January 14, 2007

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    Marvelous Sonja!!!

    I think one of you very best in many ways. for how many womena nd men have not expereinced this very feeling more than once, some many times?? Now, this part I really, really loved!

    numbers and names,
    numbers and names...
    like some strange game.

    Then, with only one
    snapshot of my heart
    I trap the light from your eyes
    and I see
    you

    framed with my love.


    siggghh, I wish I had written those words...sweet and delectable like a good night kiss.


    JD

    • Sonja
      January 14, 2007
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      Thank you JD for so nice comment I would like to say much more but you alredy said everything. Almost. lol...
      ~Sonja~

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