Lover, you're made of gold-
and precious stones;
a jewellery box, filled
with love and light and hope.
You shine for me-
effortlessly;
when you open up your
heart, there's no admission fee.
Lover, joy to behold-
i've never known;
a treasure chest filled
with such delight and scope.
You cherish me-
it's ecstasy;
you give your precious
love, and all you've got for free.
Author notes
option 4
A contest entry
- Write about love by Saphire Dreams.
450 points, ended March 25, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
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this is just beautiful such warming so much love flows within your line beautiful poem good luck
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Whoa! Great ending on this poem! Again, the rhyme fits! I feel this fitted even more, if that is possible.
The comparison is stylish : love and jewelry.. shiny and brilliant. Lovely write once again.
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Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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Nicely written. Thanks for entering.
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nice piece. it is great. thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.
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This is a nice piece. Simple, but moving.
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this is really nice. thank you for entering my contest. good luc
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This is absolutely beautiful and my favourite lines are
You shine for me-
effortlessly;
when you open up your
heart, there's no admission fee.
How clever of you to compare your love to precious stones. Beautiful
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Thank you for sharing your priceless treasures of love wtih us all, Some of life's most wonderful treasures come for free
A joy to read .
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
this
is
reallllly
cute
but read my edit
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very beautiful, good luck
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A stunning write, very beautiful, good luck
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Oh, this is such a gorgeous poem. When I read the first line, it reminded me of a song...it was funny. But when I really got into reading, it captured my attention. It's an extremely beautiful poem. Thank you so much for entering and good luck in my contest.
~Raine~
**I'd so give you applause but I already used them all...
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i really liked it... nice beat and beautiful look on love ♥ Kitty ♥
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congratulations on a gold with this very good write
one of these days i will not have to come back to edit my terrible spelling
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Congrats on the gold honey bunny! Very nicely done.
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Thanks for entering
I especially liked the last stanza:
"You cherish me-
it's ecstasy;
you give your precious
love, and all you've got for free."
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I like this poem quite a bit. Thanks for entering it into my contest
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Just beautiful I could feel the love throughout your write. So full of emotion. Great flow and content good luck in my contest
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Such a sweet write! I enjoyed the usage of jewelry as a metaphor of this love. Interesting way to use it. Wonderfully written! Thanks for your entry and good luck!
~Lori
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thank you for entering with this very lovely write and good luck in the contest this is a sweet and loving poem
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I loved the entire poem's metaphor. It was so lovely! The entire write made me smile. Your rhyme scheme was actually decent (which is a compliment from me since I usually despise rhyming). The last line was so love-filled! Thank you for entering my contest.
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This is a great poem Good Job!
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Wow!!!! This straight out gave me chills!!!! Soooo beautiful and full of love!!!! Thank you for entering it and Good Luck!!!!
~DAWN~
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Thanks for entering
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Wow, this drips of sweetness...lucky is the woman this was written for
Ruth
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As a poem, I like this very much, it's just beautiful. Words are lovely. I would prefer the title to be "Cherish Me, Lover" From your last stanze. It's in a lovely poetic style, but would need development to become a love song. Suggestion, take stanza, "You shine for me--" use that as a chorus the last one. Words would have to be rearranged to fit into musical notation format. Thanks for entering though. I'd love to see you develop it more. Sincerely, Walt
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this is a nice poem. Very nice indeed. Reading all entries right now, first time. Will get back to you. Walt. Tks for entering. P. S. Prewrites are ok. All the same
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A very precious poem you have penned here, that pulls on my heart stings of love, gently, alluringly. Your romantic nature is a treasure to behold. The rhyme and theme are delightful.
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cute analogy
I like the poem a lot especially this part "You shine for me-
effortlessly;
when you open up your
heart, there's no admission fee."
Kudos for rhyming =)
Thanks for entering my contest!
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This is a lovely poem that you have penned here well done dear poet good luck in my contest
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Wow Alex
Wow Alex, this is a very well written and indeed a passionate Poem. Keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest.
Cheers
Terry
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SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO SWEETs
Hi floorboards, Ah this was such a warm and fuzzy poem. I hope your sweet love got to read it. Simply lovely. Thank you for sharing. Such a pleasure to read.m You take care, Sandy
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awuuuh, this was really, really cute & too damn sweet. i loved it.
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bravo
Wonderful, excellent and, oh, soooo very roooomantic! Loved it! bravo...bravo...bravo!
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This was beautiful. It was simply written but each stanza had a very loving word to describe your love.
Wonderfully done...with love and passion.
Great job
Soulful Woman
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sweet
this is a sweet and sincers little love poem. i enjoyed it very much.
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One of my favorite words in Life "Precious" can be so used to hurt and to endeer. In the south its used to put down as in "Isn't she just perfectly Precious". Kiss of death. Up north I found it to be just the opposite. Precious is Precious period. I admire that you laid this out in a tribute to one that is giving you the gift of an open heart and you in return can treat that gift as so precious, very virtuous. Nice read!
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Caressed the heart with this one...written so beautifully and so passionately....great job here....keep the ink flowing....smiles, Terry
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Great metaphor you have used in the lines of this poem - good flow and wonderful message. Sentiments well expressed here - easy to read and understand.
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Awww this is really sweet and beautiful. I enjoyed this a lot, would make a nice song. Great job and keep up the good work.
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Very beautiful, definitely worthy of praise.
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Very sweet and meaningful, definitely worthy of praise.
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wow, this is good, you have done a great job on this. it is loving and caring to the fullest keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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This poem flows sweetly. Your words reveal the appreciation that you have for the one who you love - who loves you. Giving each other the emotional love and support is just as you have so elequently stated
' a jewelery box filled with love, light and hope. Truly heartwarming. Well done my friend.
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Sweetly Done
A touch of sweetness is a joy forever and this poem embodies the wholesome meaning of the primary clause.
Beautifully done and the subject glows amidst your glorious sentences--cheers Shubs
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