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A Dying Dreamer

Midnight wishes and waking dreams
Of you being here
Chasing away lonely nightmares
Striking fear into the demons of the dark
Squeezing tightly
Speaking deeply
Of what can never be

Naked thoughts
Nothing hidden
Spewing forth truths
As if holding them in
Makes one ill

Can a wish be taken
Can it be hidden
When two know
Ones mind
Ones thoughts
Can it be forever kept out of site
Deep within the eyes of a liar
For there it could never be beleived
Who would think that it could be true
When spoken form the lips
Of one who promises the stars
To anyone that smiles at them
Or gives them the time of day

May all remain quiet of this
May the music cover the silence
Of a hopeless dream
And
A dying dreamer 

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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 20, 2007

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    Wonderful Writing

    Wonderful writing. I agree, the imagery is something else in this. The flow is superb as well. Keep writing, you have talent. All the best

    Wayne


  • Laura
    June 19, 2007

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    this is brilliant the imagery is outstanding forcing the reader to drift off into deep thought very well done to you xxx

  • dandelioness
    June 18, 2007

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    this is sweet steve
    you've captured my attention with out too much sugarcoating, it's just damn good

  • Ankeeta silver member
    June 17, 2007

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    uhmm dreams shud never die nor shud the dreamer....its because of dreams one keeps oneself full on hope and faith
    i loved ur lines..they can be put in some sweet country song

    keeep going
    Ankita


  • Heropsycho
    April 5, 2007

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    I really like this, not just certain lines in particular, but the whole piece really puts out a mood and a lot of imagery.


  • Alittle2lost
    April 3, 2007
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    Absolutly Beautiful....
    Bravo

  • Easy Assumption
    March 23, 2007

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    nice job

    I like the alliteration (is that the right word?) of "Squeezing tightly, speaking deeply".
    I also like imagery of the untrustworthy person "one who promises the starts to anyone that smiles at them..." I can't help but wonder if you're speaking form a recent experience... either way, you have crafted this very well. Brave


  • StarrieNacht
    January 15, 2007

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    Oh... Of one who promises the stars.To anyone that smiles at them.Or gives them the time of day... these are my favorite lines. Very thought provoking yet saddening. Sounds like you have to starve your heart out to be noticed by whomever you write this piece about. Beautifully captured and oh-so moving.
    Thank you for sharing this
    Find lots of pennies ~Night


  • Touchof1der silver member
    January 15, 2007

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    There have been times in my life when I think all that really sustained, emotionally at least, were the dreams that another planted in my head. They weren't true, would and could never be true, but at the time I fooled myself into believing them and even let them carry me until I could carry myself again. Your poem brought back memories of a few of those times for me.
    ♥ Touchof1der

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