Dear loved ones,
please do not feel guilty
it was just my time to go.
I see that you are feeling sad
and I see the tears that flow.
We are all here on this earthly place
for what we call our lifetime
and for some of us it's not as long as others.
I ask you not to continue to cry,
as I see you shed so many tears.
Please remember,
I haven't really left you
even though you may feel so.
For you see
I have gone on to heaven
and I am closer than you know.
When you need me
you need just call my name
I am standing right beside you.
I know you long to see me
but I cannot yet come to you.
I promise I will send you messages
from heaven up above so please try to understand.
For when you come to "Cross Over"
I'll be there to take your hand.
A contest entry
- Tears of Goodbye by Abstract Image.
490 points, ended April 9, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Sweet!!
I love it-a message of comfort and love. Awesome
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Beautiful
I really loved this poem. I had a great flow and even a rhyme or two. It spoke to me and almost made me cry. Good luck. -
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Thank you!!
Thank you for your wonderful comment ... I am no pro but I write from the heart and wish to write what some may not be able to express in words. I am glad you were pleased with it. Thank you again for your beautiful comment ... will return the favor!
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emotionally fullfilling
This is by far the most heartfelt and emotional poem about death I have read. You really hit home with dealing with loss. I just lost my father this past Thanksgiving and this has givin me hope and solice in his passing, for I grieve for him every single day. It makes me feel there is hope - etermnally
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You have penned a lovely poem specially the romantic ending you gave to it. One day we may meet our love ones if we really love them even in heavenly paradises. Goodbye is not that easy to say but it can be told if there is the hope of meeting again.
Thank you for sharing your poetic piece with us :-)
~Massy~
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Beautifully Written
This is a well written piece that is very soft and gentle yet deep and emotional. Great job and thank you so much for sharing.....Michael
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Loving
This was a heartfelt emotional poem full off love and actually compassion. Wonderful flow and rhythm from it. What a wonderful thought and selfless this to do for your family in a time when they want to remember you most. Great penning here, keep it up.
Becky
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very sweet
sad and gentle little poem. I have learned, through all of my loss, that in reality the tears we cry are for ourselves and OUR loss, a part of the process, they say; Not that it makes them any easier nor, certainly, less valid, but realizing it helped with my process, for sure. There are mony of my poems that I am realizing you will appreciate... check out "Making of a Guardian Angel" I think you will be touched by it's message, if not it's poetic value lol -
Something like this would be wounderful for your family to find at the appropriate time - to have read at the funeral, or printed on the leaflet given out by the family at the time of death. Very personl and something that would mean so much to them. Loved reading this as I think we should all leave something like this behind for our family to find when we pass on.
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This is really nice I like your use of the coouplet here as a tie between life and death, and the love that goes beyond.
You have a gentle heart, that beats strong.
Much enjoyed.
Look forward to reading more.
Shadows
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Good job! I thought this poem had a great idea behind it, and it is very emotional and sweet. I think you could try to improve the rhyming to make it seem a bit more natural, and I think you could have chosen some better words, but otherwise great job!
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wow
i really like this, it reminds me of a letter i got from my husband when he was over seas, and he was just saying that if anything did happen, he wanted me to know some stuff. well thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene -
hi i thought this was really emotional and sad it brought tears to my eyes but you have written it in a beautiful way thanks for sharing this with us
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Meaningful
I loved this, the thought, emotion, everything put forth to make it come alive. Truly a meaningful piece, I hope this touches others like it has me. Once again, a wonderful write, and please keep it up, I enjoyed every line of it.
.:. Beth .:.
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Aww
It was really sad yet full of love, i write alot of spiritual poetry and i know how hard it can be i mean in the way of tears flowing with our pens, as we write we can't see through the glassy liquid that has over taken our eyes.
I wish you all the best and I'll make sure i'll read a some more of your work i absolutly loved because of the emotion portrayed from it
well done my friend
raffles xx
p.s remember poetry is our gift to the world...
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Aww, this is sad. I hope that you've buried this in your closet and that no one has read this in your family yet... gave me tears. You aren't such a bad writer yourself! Thank you very much for reading my poetry!
Mech
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beautiful. your first coupe of poems on here are very good. the passion in them is subtle, yet powerful. you've got alot of talent, and i can't wait to read more. Welcome to AP.
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Thats a really sweet twist on a usually depressing subject. You have written this with light and hope, spreading some comfort on a sad subject matter. I really liked this piece.
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Very sweet. Goodbye is always difficult. Nice to know, though, that when we pass, at least if we believe it to be, that we won't cross over alone. Nice portrayal of that.
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