In eyes of innocence surreal
I see the heaven I will never feel
Dreams fading amongst the dying light
Of hope and peace you rape me tonight
When all is lost where do I turn?
Is there anything left in life to yearn?
I have seen malice I have felt the tears
Drowned in the sea of sorrows and fears
I have seen the sin our nefarious race holds
Peered into the heart of our vanishing souls
God has judged us unfit for life
His darkness breeds angels of strife
Come torments of hell I long for thee
Pain is eternal in the blood of purity
Author notes
We have sinned, we have murdered,and we have raped this world of innocence, yet who should we blame? Ourselves or our creator?
"Option 3"
A contest entry
- Dark Or Depressing Take 2 -No prewrites this time- by Poet-of-the-shadows.
700 points, ended February 7, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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This is different to me, but good none the less. Creative. Le travail merveilleux. Good luck.
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excellent poem, i loved how you rythmed and wrote it,
i loved
In eyes of innocence surreal
I see the heaven I will never feel
Dreams fading amongst the dying light
Of hope and peace you rape me tonight
When all is lost where do I turn?
Is there anything left in life to yearn?
I have seen malice I have felt the tears
Drowned in the sea of sorrows and fears
I have seen the sin our nefarious race holds
Peered into the heart of our vanishing souls
this was my aboslute favorite part of the poem and it was just awesome, i loved your choice of title aswell
good luck in the contest
keep writing
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A very powerfull and vivid picture. such creativity could only make such a deep poem. Thank you for entering in my contest.
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vivid , and full of immagionation ... I loved it , good luck in my contest
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My god... This is truly incredible. Amazing; vivid and graphic. This is an extremely wonderful read. Each line setting up for the next, the timing and rhythm are almost perfect. I have to say... well done. I believe you have this one in the bag my friend.
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AYE, very dark my friend, i can see the pain oozing from this, tears in ink for certain !!
When all is lost where do I turn?
Is there anything left in life to yearn?
*hugs* just keep writing and letting love and light into your life, it WILL get better!! Peg -
wow
Wow this is awesome, I love it. You have amazing poetry and the insight that you give is awesome. You're poetry makes people think and that's what it needs to do, just wow. I love your poetry.
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