Let Go.-Still Breathing-2007
Sitting here
with the window wide open
lost in fear
letting go
maybe the token
Drift away from this place
silence spread
and then we break
do you know
I`m not ready to Wait.
Let go of me
let go of me
let go of what I want to be
let go of what we`ve become;
trying to be free
I feel like I`m losing my way
darkness comes closer
today
try my best to walk away
it keeps building pressure
for me to keep going
for you to keep Helping
but....
we`ll be okay
Hey!
do you hear me
not making a sound
whisper in silence
stop fooling around
mute out the violence
we fall to the ground
.....
see all my tears
wash away fears
not just my own...
take a look at Theirs.
Let go of me
let go of me
let go of what we believe
let go of what we decieve
let go of what we can not achieve
Face this stubburn world
stop this pointless war
end it today
begin smiling someday
treat the children to love
give them new meanings
for what we couldn`t let go of.
Say it`s alright
wonder where we`ll be tonight
take a hold of my hand
step to where we plan to stand
watch the world let go
listen to the wind as it blows
take us away
to that peaceful place
in my dreams
in your dreams
in that scene
where we believe
there`s so much to be
now do you see
now do I see
.....
Let go...
of being ordinary.
Author notes
Thank you for reading! Haven`t written one in a while.
Is It Too Much?
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No, no, not at all too much
That was personal, or no? It sounded like it would make a very good song, and I liked the way it was written, leading up to the final line like that. Yes, this was very good. It sounded like an old dream that everyone's had, if that makes sense to you.
I tried to rate your comment 5 stars! I don't think it came through....PC problems. But thank you for everything.
~O.A.
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THIS ROX!!!
Ryaan, Dude , you are so fuckin talented, This was amazing, Damn I envy your talent!!! Great job on writing this!
~Alanna~
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Wonderful
This is lyrical! A wonderful rhythmic write from you! I don't know how I missed this! Good thing I came snooping
~Tia
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YES
it really is but that does not mean that this is not a great ead...now your ending extremley powerful awesome...'let go of being ordinary' beautiful line no joke....i think this length looses what you truly want to express to the reader...best, radical -
It gets me fasinated, and I really want to keep on reading. It is really good! It's thoughtful, and it shows that you care about what you have written... There is a lot of great lines and stanzas, creating this awesome piece! And then it comes to the end, and it all fits, makes sence, and make me think!
"Let go...
of being ordinary."
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Beautiful
no its not too much it was beutiful i really enjoyed this poem so i think im going to read more of your poetry
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wow!!!!
as always once aagain..you have written a fabulous write....
Sitting here
with the window wide open
lost in fear
letting go
maybe the token
this i like...great opening lines.....
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AMAZING
Very nicely written, i enjoyed it! its an amazing piece of work and i like the concept of it, I like where it came from to where you brought it to. Great Job! Keep up the good work!!!
~tearstaindangel~
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Amazing flow and structure, this shows so much emotion and how wanting to be ordinary fells like. This is a great write!
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it is good to see you back, this is a strong poem you have written here ,keep it flowing and welcome back
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wow
this poem was like way good... it had an interesting flow, and the was you had structured sentences was pretty good.. thanks so much fr haring- ps, you OWE me one hahaah...
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WOW!!! simply amazing!! i love this poem, its amazing!! i dont xactly know how 2 put it other than that./ simply breathtaking.
-Extraordinary Girl
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but what is ordinary?
great job fasho!!!!!
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you're right too babe
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no you were first
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This is great! I sang them along to music I wrote and it was like "AHH SO COOL" lol. It's such an amazing write. It is definitly one of my favourites and I'm glad you shared! Excellent1
Peace N Love
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WOW!
OMG! This was really really really truely good! I didn`t get it at first but you as you read along, you understand the meaning and the concept! Very well said! Very thoughtful and emotional! Keep it up and please take care! muaaahz!
Let go...
of being ordinary.
The last stanza was really good!
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Not tto much at alll
No this is not too much at all it is just fine the way you are just fine this poem is very emotinal and has good use of emotin just one thing you have to do get online more ok got i get and do it.
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WOW
WOW this is very good.different but good.very good use of emotions and feelings.good write.
~~SHIRREE~~**A.K.A**~~OCEAN DREAMS~~
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Wow, this is awesome. The flow was amazing and i loved this part:
'Face this stubburn world
stop this pointless war
end it today
begin smiling someday
treat the children to love
give them new meanings
for what we couldn`t let go of.'
Keep it up!!!
Michelle
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