Those multitudes of sin are
variations on a theme -
A reflection of the heart’s wickedness
and all the evil that Satan deems.
He himself, suffering from hatefulness and hurt,
does exploit physicality’s weakness in Man.
For Satan’s attacks continue from his being -
Eternally condemned and forever damned.
In a false semblance of our God,
the count of unique sins is three
in a twisted parallel of…
The sacred number of Trinity.
Opposing the Christ in wilderness’ testing
he perceived the Lord’s flesh failing,
but not the Spirit’s strength in handling
a confrontation with the Kingdom without ending.
These concepts –the Earthly Pride of Life
coupled with the Lust of the Flesh and of the Eyes—
maintain our separation from God
as the Devil manipulates, through deceiving lies.
The boldness of the Savior’s Truth
and the Christ’s everlasting victory
(as demonstrated by Him at Calvary)
provide True Life, when you just believe.
From my book "Reaching Towards His Unbounded Glory"
ISBN: 1-4196-5051-3
- Biblical and Christian Conversation group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Time with God #20 by Samplette.
300 points, ended January 26, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites by aeolia.
400 points, ended October 26, 2008, 130 entries
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You are so right about SIN! Christ will not tolerate evil sinners to share heaven with him and his Father and all sinners will GO TO HELL. God bless you for telling it just like it actually is at this moment in time/,.
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inspiring
I love the end bit her when you just believe, because its something im always saying to my kids, all god wants is for you to just believe, and to do the best you can to follow him, this is a very inspiring poem for me that i will share with my kids and those i work with in church thanks littlefishone
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Interesting; I found it difficult to read, or perhaps, to comprehend, although I am not sure why; perhaps it is because I am tired, and so for that reason, I will return later to reread this and see does it cast any better understanding upon the poem for me. best wishes
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What a powerful message within this piece! I am counting this as my devotion for the day! Awesome!
Many blessings,
Frogz~
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This felt a tad forced and waaaaaaay too preachy, but if you're strong in your faith, that's nice, I suppose.
"the count of unique sins is three"-- The phrasing's kind of reminiscent of Monty Python. "Now, old woman! You are accused of heresy on three counts. Heresy by thought, heresy by word, heresy by deed, and heresy by action. Four counts. Do you confess?" Hello there, Cardinal Ximinez. -
I really like this poem!
The first 2 lines are my favorites!
Keep up the good work!
I'd love to read more from you in the future!
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He himself, suffering from hatefulness and hurt,
does exploit physicality’s weakness in Man.
For Satan’s attacks continue from his being -
Eternally condemned and forever damned.
i really like this part
and the poem is really good
i am still learning how to write a good comment but i feel i am trying to express my feelings towards this poem is natural
that i like it -
i like the first two lines ;Those multitudes of sin are
variations on a theme thats so true and In a false semblance of our God,
this is so true and it decribes life so well im a cutter emo i wership the devel i hater this world and i sin alot but i still liked this poem
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i really liked this poem
you have written great
Congratulations on the win-you really deserved it. A beautiful poem! I want to print this out and share with my peers. You cannot read this without being emotionally moved. It is heart warming and heart rendering at the same time. I love the title and the theme-you keep it clearly tied throughout the work. Keep up the good job! -
These concepts –the Earthly Pride of Life
coupled with the Lust of the Flesh and of the Eyes—
maintain our separation from God
as the Devil manipulates, through deceiving lies.
ohh what a creation
you have written real good buddy
i have read it slowly and read twice i love it -
flesh and soul.
the flesh is weak but the spirit is fierce,
to be led by the spirit gives us strength from God.
EXCELLENT WRITE MY FRIEND
GOD BLESS...
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I like the way you presented this poem. Also, you had a nice flow and rhyme scheme.
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The poem wasn't what i thought it was going to be from the title, however i still enjoyed it because it just escaped having an over preachy tone to it. Even though i gave up on god and the church after nine years doesnt mean i don't think we have to fight demons, i just think it's the demons inside us that matter, not some imagined personification of the "Devil"
FeliX
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its a nice poem. i typically am not the religious poem type but this one had a zest to it that just popped out. good write and keep on writting you have a good narrative voice!!!
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i got confused at some parts but that just might be my ADD. Well written poem. Beautifull penned though. Thank you for sharing! Keep up the great writing!
spreading some love
miley -
This sounds more like an essay then a poem but it can be interpurted many ways. Although it is a bit confusing, it does bring up good points. It seems apparent that you are an atheist/satanist or just have a different view on the world than the typical everyday person
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Yes, I've been told that I think differently; however, I am neither an atheist nor a satanist.
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nice!
I love your creativeness! the twisting of words is really amazing. and i love this poem i feel like its very spiritual and creative. It great! ...........
Keep writting,
Samantha :-)
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its interesting its a good write you can look at it two ways i have to agree with the ladie below me.. but its very beautiful
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Ummmm. I have no idea what I think. On one hand, I love it, its creative and emotive, on the other hand..Im like..WHATTTT?. But I think, that in particular your stanza "In a false semblance etc etc" I enjoyed it very much, the way you twisted your words to create meaning.
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In a false semblance of our God,
the count of unique sins is three
in a twisted parallel of…
The sacred number of Trinity.
that's all that needs to be said -
Nice
It's nice, I like it. God did give the ultimate gift to save us. We should be willing to give back all that we are. -
Truthfully enlightining!
Your words bring to mind how many people still stand in doubt...as for me hope will always spring eternal for Jesus did shed his blood for all of us to be free! Blessings to you always and good luck in the contest!
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nice poem...
i like it..
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a home run!
I think you have captured the nature of sin in chracterizing it as a variation of a theme. After all isn't 'sin' just plain selfishness in various and ugly forms as well as beautiful desires? Definitely a thought provoker here. I Like It!!
Shalom -
Interesting
I like it !
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minority report #2
You put this up in our groups reading list, so I'm assuming you are looking for feedback. My intention is not for it to sound harsh, but it may. For being a published work, I am surprised by its lack of structure, yet it also is to structured to be free form. The stanzas feel awkward for example:
in a twisted parallel of…
The sacred number of Trinity.
This may have had more effect if you took out the word "number of" and the ... of the previous line
in a twisted parallel
of the sacred Trinity.
Which I know changes your meaning... so perhaps
of the sacred number three
Though I also have strong difficulties with the wording of this work, you and I have very different theologies.
The last 4 lines sound like they come from a different poem.
Theologically: Fundamentalist
Style: Unsure
Hopeful or Vengeful: Vengeful
Edifying to Christians: Not in my opinion
Just for your consideration in future work, what about what Paul said: Romans 8:38-39 For I am convinced that neither death, nor life, nor angels, nor rulers, nor things present, nor things to come, nor powers, nor height, nor depth, nor anything else in all creation, will be able to separate us from the love of God in Christ Jesus our Lord.
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Well, we are all entitled to our opinion...
Well, we are all entitled to our opinion...
The number of three respresents the Trinity (Father, Son & Holy Ghost/Spirit); in addition, there are three classifications of sin.
The style is free-form; hence there is no standard structure.
All of the poetry in my book has been reviewed by a professional editor. Thus the grammar is fine.
This piece is far from vengeful - after all, our Hope is found in Christ and His Love for us. Therefore, I'll have to strongly disagree with your opinion. -
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I understand what you meant by the 3 (though I only see 2 categories you may be thinking of in the work.... pride and lust) classifications, but the wording is awkward, that was all I meant.
Be careful with a free-form style that has some irratic rhyming (Theme/Deem, eyes/lies) they throw off the reader. I wasn't sure if it should all rhyme or if this was just coincidence or what.
You don't have to take suggestions, but even professional editors can be improved upon!
"maintain our separation from God
as the Devil manipulates, through deceiving lies." doesn't sound hope-filled to me, it sounds like we are stuck in our depravity forever separated from the love of God!
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Really a Fantastic poem
Wow this is a great poem I'm sure you've heard that a few times with it but I think its wicked. What caught my attention was "He himself, suffering from hatefulness and hurt,
does exploit physicality’s weakness in Man.
For Satan’s attacks continue from his being -
Eternally condemned and forever damned." that blows me away. XD You did a great job on this poem it must have taken you a while to write it. I wish to one day write as well as you!
Much respect,
~Kimber
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enough to make me consider it as a true possibility.... bravo x
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Okay, you asked what I think. I think sometimes less is more. This is good, but it seems like it is almost crowded into the stanzas. If it were, and it isn't, I might rearage the the stanzas so the verses were shorter, you would have more lines but it may flow a little smoother. Again, want to say, good subject matter.
Anna -
Nice write.
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I truly admire the innovative and imaginative talent that I see busy at work here, flowing across the page in all its glory. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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very nice!i love the words you put into this poem!i love the ending its pure and sweet!to tell you the truth i think this one of the best poems on this website!well i have to go!bye,as i always say always try your best and never give up!
sincerely,
sweetdancer (yasmine) -
really like this poem
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Great poem. It so strong and powerful. It is really good. I like it a lot. It is very bold, and you wrote about the truth. It is truly amazing. Fantastic Job
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Beautifully written with a great theme. you have a good sense of flow. my fave part "For Satan’s attacks continue from his being -
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Inded it is great light on the subject through your glorious journey of the words...I can see here the creation of the thought through the delivery of the muse and bringing a kind of the truth from the another world and that is the beauty of the life which resembles almost with the universal bliss as well..it is a great thought here
my friend...
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Very bold much truth is wrote in the verse above. The Savior's Truth can set us free. When you believe is the first step in the journey of faith. Jesus death at calvary gave us life with him. Jesse told his disciples I go to make many rooms in my Madison. Some day we will be with him in heaven. One of our poets at ap is very ill. His name is Brian please keep him in you're prayers. This is an awesome tribute to our Savior. May God bless you richly.
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A religious thyme
Many faiths are based on what man says. the truth , I think , is much deeper. We are in trouble when we pass on our God & your words tell of the plight we just might have to face
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This is beautifully put together. It is layered. There are some who will not grasp its deeper meaning but they can still leave with something and that is a true gift in writing.
Very well done.
John
PS - Thankyou for visiting my site. Perchance you could leave a comment or two.
JS
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Very well written tribute to your faith.
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You commented on my poem and helped me edit, so I thought I’d come to see who you are. I’m glad I did! Your work is remarkable; the fluidic motion in this piece is wonderful as it slides off the lips. Your image is vivid and powerful opening a window to your heart. You have the heart of a poet my friend.
Love,
Amera
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The boldness of the Savior’s Truth
and the Christ’s everlasting victory
(as demonstrated by Him at Calvary)
provide True Life, when you just believe.
so true man, so true.
thanks for sending this my way. to be honest, it was a real encouragement to me and something that i definitely had to read.
be well, be blessed in His name.
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"Those multitudes of sin are
variations on a theme -"
Yes, they are - a theme that began when Adam and Eve wanted to become like God and fell for a lie. Amen, brother! I appreciate your work.
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Mankind needs Faith to deal with Fear, Wisdom to vanquish Ignorance and Humbleness to replace Pride, in order to detect and fight the lies of the illusion in space and time we call life and to open up our hearts and minds to The True Light. It seems we are urged to increasingly talk to our Creator as the final changes of this world approach. May The Light have mercy on this world. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
U
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tihs is nice, but the contest calls to talk to God, not about Him or as a third party. Beautifully done, and I think you for entering.
Sam
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Believing in him and slamming the door on satans toes is the key. That is why Jesus endured such atrocities! A wonderful piece you have written here. thanks for sharing your faith and best wishes in the contest!
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Sin is indeed induced into the heart of man. It has been a carefully designed and constructed idea, carried out with unspeakably cruel determination. For thousands of centuries mankind has been poisoned, lied to, betrayed, abused, tormented and murdered. And still in this evil soaken atmosphere The Light is able to touch our hearts, make us feel HIS infinite Love, comfort us and give us strength to survive the ephemeral rule of the dark on earth. True Life we will be given too. Sometimes I just can not wait for that splenderous instant to take place. Thank you for creating and sharing. I enjoyed reading the credentials of your faith and hope many will experience the same emotion reading this poem. take care,
U
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He dwells in my house and in my heart, Satan might try but he will not win. Blessing to you.
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belief and allowing him to enter, when he knocks
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Minority report.
Firstly, I would not dream of challenging your faith.
However, it seems to me that just about every poem put up here as an expression of Christian faith is not well executed, usually jumbled, and sometimes theologically confusing/confused. I do wish writers of these poems would realise that there is much more to an expression of faith than its fervour.
I would ask anyone who is going to write of these vital matters to pray long and hard, and to ask themselves whether the words they are given are from God, or are their own gushings. Do not forget, that if you post and promote on AP, you are putting yourselves forward as ambassadors of Christ.
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This is very powerful! Not many have a true grasp of the Teachings, and you have managed to put the truth about the “sins” through in a way that many will be able to understand. I have a great respect for anyone who can take on a subject such as this and do it justice, and you have truly done just that! The flow is good, the content divine, and the overall message is incredibly well penned.
Well Done
~Dragonsong~
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Third line in stanza one seems to stick out like a sore thumb to me, but very thoughtful opening overall.
Intriguing second stanza.
Even more intriguing is stanza three, but how is the count of unique sins three? You don't really explain than.
I don't really like the fourth line in stanza five because it seems unnatural to me, but you are proving to be an interesting storyteller.
I think stanza five is the best.
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outstanding poem applaud applauds applauds
Wow this write is so powerful. You left me speechless. It really touched my heart deeply. This is a amazing piece a master piece. I applaud you sincerely. (Lisa)
"These concepts –the Earthly Pride of Life
coupled with the Lust of the Flesh and of the Eyes—
maintain our separation from God
as the Devil manipulates, through deceiving lies."
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I really liked everything but the last stanza. The last stanza made the poem a bit run-of-the-mill-religous. sorry -
Beautifully Written
This is so wonderfully written and so powerful. I love the truth and the awesome flow of the words. This is a fine piece of art. Thanks for writing such spirit filled writings, it is a blessing! God Bless, FAH
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Another in a long line of beautiful pieces, Joe. Thank you for sharing so much of your Spiritual self with us all. Hugs, Patricia
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