(Desperation)
I awoke to a shattered reality,
my hope frozen into finality.
No fountain of dreams, my well ran dry ,
emotions wasting, withered, they die.
Am I alive inside this great wall?
Or in limbo awaiting a final free fall?
Where is the light shining from inside?
Why in darkness do I choose to hide?
Suffocation in the extreme,
this is my life, not just a dream.
I am searching the great divide,
for comfort and clarity, a way to survive...
(Hope)
Such beauty I see wearing a sad mask,
could this be the one of my vision I ask.
A deluge of caring, feel my cleansing rain,
powerful and healing, erasing your pain.
Such a great love hiding in deep sorrow,
together emerging from where you now wallow.
Dare you journey to a far better place?
A great light shines from your beautiful face.
Radiating hope, cutting through fear,
touched by your eyes, welling in tears.
A destined meeting in time and space?
Questions fleeting, a mind at race.
(Desperation)
Pain has contorted the face that you see,
wanting and needing to be set free.
Free from these shackles that forever bind,
the scars on my eyes render me blind.
You speak of hope, tiniest of flames,
but you do nothing to silence these pains.
Show me the future, whisper me of peace,
accompany me to my sweet release.
Then I will believe in you once more,
until then I will simply lock the door.
Leaving my conscious totally alone,
to bear the scars upon matter and bone...
(Hope)
Dreams that are buried like a chest in the sea,
perhaps together we could find the key?
I am strong enough to break through steel,
given the time, I have power to heal.
I speak of nothing more than a chance,
I give no promises of song or dance.
Yet I will accept you just as you are,
walk by your side, down the road ever far.
I only ask you believe just enough,
take a chance, let me in, I know it's tough.
Hard to see when you're so alone,
In my arms, you will find a welcoming home.
(Desperation)
Such promises Hope, I've heard them before,
Each and every time you arrive at my door.
I trust and I wait, all to no avail,
for the light of hope is silent and pale.
You ask me to trust, to wait patiently,
but the pain inside has taken control of me.
I try to reach out to just accept your hand,
but hope keeps slipping away like time's sand.
So tell me dear Hope what can I do,
to move forward and let your light shine through?
Is there a path that I need to take?
So the sun may shine again when I wake.
(Hope)
Heard them before and you may yet again,
I have delivered many from such great pain.
The only friend that so many have,
I comfort their fears, soothe like a salve.
Correct you are, it takes faith and belief,
I know that it's hard, to see through the grief.
I will walk with you, place your hand in mine,
slipping at points, but with you through time.
You must make a choice, you can take my path,
will it be worth it? You do the math.
The choice is yours to take if you may,
feel my love shining on you everyday.
Desperation turns and silently opens the door,
allowing hope to enter once more.
And with all that is held within, she prays,
that hope will bring forth, much better days!
Author notes
This piece was written in collaboration with Jason Dorn
Photography courtesy of Jason Dorn
This is a personification piece, a conversation between desperation and hope.
"Hope transcends finality"
My own quote.
I know the rules
In a list
A contest entry
- INSPIRATION AND MOTIVATION by Jeremy0826.
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Beautiful and truly uplifting. The dialogue perfectly explored the struggle we find within ourselves. May the door be always open, and the threshhold continually crossed.
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Thank you for entering this poem in our contest! I loved the form you used in the poem, the words were so strong, and uplifting. You have a beautiful way with your words, I hope you choose to enter future contests of ours!! I do not award out claps to entries but I will offer it two thumbs up!! Thank you, ~Nikki
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I like it. It shows the consistent switch in a persons life between depression and saddness. I think a lot of people can relate to it. Nice write.
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very well done!
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You've obviously put a lot of careful thought, as well as time and energy into this very lovely poem. A real pleasure to read and ponder. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering this wonderful piece.
David
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a truly inspiring and amazing poem ... so creative and unique ... a veritable ray of hope and faith ...
maa
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You both did a wonderful job with
this piece. This is amazing and
I really enjoyed reading it from
beginning to end. Your poem is
very unique, moving, and creatively
written. I love the moral and the
fact that you wrote it as a conversation
taking place between two people.
I love the imagery and thought that
you put into this. Wonderful work
here and thank you very much for
your entry in my contest. I appreciate
it and wish you the best of luck with it!
Jeremy0826 -
this is absolutely amazing. almost brought a tear to my eye. thankyou.
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I really liked this. Thanks for entering!
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Amazing!
I love it, it is so beautiful and heartfelt. It runs so smoothly and is so well crafted and TRUE. What a wonderful conversation captured in time. Thank you for sharing and entering my contest! Good luck!
~ashira ladonai~
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I think the format worked well, an interesting self-debate that many of us seem to have raging within us. Thank you for sharing it.
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Great write!!! I love the way you bring to light hope and despair.. It is so true.
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Profoundly True!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is so profound and true!!! You capture the inner struggle between hope and desperation here. Just like the battle between good and evil and we have to choose which one we will listen to. I loved this and you did a tremendous job it flowed smoothly and the imagery is quite vivid!!!thanks for sharing this piece I can tell you put your heart and soul into it!!!!!Toni
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you have very eloquently summed up why through all of our despair we continue to let hope back into our hearts....this sounds a lot like the conversation that is going on inside me right now....thank you for reminding me of why Hope should be let in!
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excellent
Wow Wow, can't say much more than that. Sure an attention getter and awakens the mind of many who can relate. Since I rambled on the last comment I will leave this as is..
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Oh I love the way you wrote this from both voices, such a very effective of writing this. It's a tribute to the human spirit that mostly we re able to see past the desolation and let hope's light in. Of course this doesn't always happen bbut this piece is one many should read.
Excellent my friend and my best to you in this contest
Gaylenes
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Oh you have penned words of wisdom again dear friend, you never fail to disappoint when you have a way of making a statement with your words. Loved it and good luck.
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An eye opener for sure as hope and desperation have there say, love this form you have used to cross from one to the other caught and held my attention and I'm so glad for the ending of this one that hope does get in one more time beautiful writing good luck in this contest...
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