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When the elves escaped

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Here with my hands over my heart

A tear in my eye, it saddens me

I loved you from the very start

Now this ship fords us out to sea

 The great elf war our home destroyed

Creaking boards and the salt air spray

Hordes of humans and elves deployed

Sailing all us elves away

 The dark elves and hydras, left behind

To fend for themselves and fight the war

Yet here on the ship we stay confined

Sailing the seas and lands to explore

 So I looked at you, a knowing grin

As I pulled out the silver bowl

Magic will find our next of kin

I look and know what they had stole

 Soon a new land we will find

To hide the elves of every kind

I thank the spirit elf above

That you are safe with me my love

 

 

 

 

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An excerpt from my novel length epic on elves

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 24

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    This is excellent, I love your poetry. Very well written. Veruy nice flow and detail. It was a pleasure to read.


  • dame de la riviere
    June 16, 2008

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    part of an epic? well what a tease! this is wonderfully imaginative and sweet in its hopeful nature. i like the rhyme style and the allusions.


  • tawk gold member
    March 5, 2008

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    What a wonderful excerpt from your novel!! I so enjoyed reading. I love to write about fairies. Vivid imagery Keep up the amazing writing

  • Eusebius
    November 6, 2007

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    bravo

    Neat and nifty and really quite wonderful! I loved this poem, loved it, loved it! bravo...bravo ...bravo...


  • Manoura xx
    January 24, 2007

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    pff...haha...i bet they would be -Lexie-...oh ya..and you had a great challenge in that poem about fire for Amera...and Amera..nice poem...and i donno if you thought it was better that way...but wouldn't it have been better if you lyk seperated each 4 lynes???it waas stilllllrealllly good...but it was just a little...teensy...weensy..bit hard to read...but the words were definately great...BYE!!!


  • Fire N Ice
    January 13, 2007
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    Wow

    I can only imagine the bedtime stories you could come up with,
    my kids would be in awe!

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