Romance
Like the nights shooting stars
Fleeting
In the day blossoms
captive in the glass
Flourishes and withers
Day to night
Night to day
Time barely acknowledges
Replenish the sky's stars
Throw them across the onyx
Where the pale moon observes
And notices...
Blossom under the glass
Adapt
But bring me the night
My lover
©SKW
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wow, this is really cool. It builds kinda slow seductive and punches hard in the end on the close. I like it. Almost theatrical.
Tamara
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Such a beautiful Poem , I can really feel the love and the Emotion in this poem, Very touching, the lines that I like the most are : "Replenish the sky's stars
Throw them across the onyx
Where the pale moon observes"
I love the imagary used in this poem, Great work.
~*Hold Fast to your dreams for the might surprise ye, Dream sweet when sleep comes the ye, and may the Dreamweaver come to ye in the still of the night and weave a dream of your desires*~
Blessed Be,
~*Dreamweaver Maiden*~
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a good poetic piece here which you have penned, very enjoyable, the flow is really good. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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WOW! Such an amazing piece here....loved the imagery....enjoyed the read.....flowed with perfection....keep the ink flowing....smiles, Terry
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Nights should be night's - if you are going to punctuate sky's later on, should do same early in poem.
I like the yearning I can feel in this piece and the line "throw them across the onyx" is a wonderfully creative description of the night sky. -
Oh wow that’s so beautiful! The love can really be felt in this poem, it’s really touching. I wish I could feel like that, really I do. Good poem!
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