You want truth?
I'll give you truth.
You want Honesty?
I'll give you honesty.
So there I stood bleeding all over you
waiting for a reaction
but you just sat there cool, calm and collected
"did u hear me?" I yell.
I just bleed myself of all
my feelings, pain, and regrets.
How can I divuldge such
passionate and imncriminating secrets
and not get an ounce of compassion or comfort
from you my friend, my partner, my lover.
Next time I'll think twice before I bleed for you.
Author notes
I Obviously chose option #2...lol
A contest entry
- Word Bank // Titles by FaireWeather.
450 points, ended January 15, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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thats a good one I like it and I've had it happen and iit sucks just I hurt people more often
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Wise decision! Think twice before you bleed for someone...are they really worth it do you really have no options. I've been there and now after I am no longer marred by the influence of drugs and drink I know that there is no reason in the world to take yourself from this world. Although my past is filled with painful memories just like yours i'm slowly learning to accept the fact that I can move on. wonderful write with a great message and stupendous emotion!
~Sorrow~
Ps thanks for your wonderful critique on Rope's End!
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I like this muchly - too many times have I let everything out to someone I thought would care and listen, and too many times have they thrown it back in my face with seeming indifference. As you said, should probably think twice before bleeding all over them again
Good poem, well written, I like it - its full of passion. I read on your profile that positive things dont motivate you to write as well as anger does, and I feel the same.
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The premise is interesting, but I really wish you would have checked your spelling and grammar before entering. It threw me off and disrupted the flow. Thank you for entering.
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