Walking along that Ocean side
just watchin' all the waves crash by
never once wondering why
underneath that starry sky
Just old friends wonderin
when our lives truly begin
now here I am thinkin
wishin those times back again...
But there you are
my newest shining star
lookin over me from afar
helping me when times get hard
Now you've ended your timeless war
never once askin for more
and I'll think of these memories
on the banks of sandy white shores
Best of friends
our fun never did end
helping one another 'round every bend
wish I could talk to you, once again
underneath those stars
Just two kids without a clue
thinkin our time was still brand new
starin into that sky so blue
never thought our time was through
But there you are
my newest shining star
lookin over me from afar
helping me when times get hard
Now you've ended your timeless war
never once askin for more
and I'll think of these memories
on the banks of sandy white shores
So here I sit
dreamin about you again
just like it's always been
and when times get hard, I'll remember back then
I'll always miss you, my dear friend
But there you are
my newest shining star
lookin over me from afar
helping me when times get hard
Now you've ended your timeless war
never once askin for more
and I'll think of these memories
on the banks of sandy white shores
Author notes
"And now the seasons are changing and waves are crashing"
by Veronica Leigh
I wrote this song for my best friend who just passed away January 6, 2007. I loved him so much and I will miss him forever.
In a list
A contest entry
- Round #1 (enter away) by takemypainaway.
390 points, ended March 22, 2008, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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so sad to lose a friend i lost a very close one
just a month ago he died just a few shy of his 21 bday
i so dearly miss him so sorry for your loss
and good poem
thank you for entering!!
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username please!!
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hey thanks for reminding me!! Sorry bout that! I fixed it for you though.
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Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. As I was reading throught his poem I was wongering why you kept leaving the g of all the ing words. After reading your comments and realizing that this was written as a song, it made more sense to me.
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This is a poem with lots of heart and heartfelt emotion, but I just don't find that it paints me a portrait. You have done an excellent job though on the rhyming and flow. Keep the ink flowing and good luck. Thanks for sharing.
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Very well written Poem shows lots of love although a lot of sadness Good Luck to you and thanks for entering the Contest
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Amazing
Amazing and you can taste the bittersweet tang in it. Your use of language,in the start, to me was like someone older, remembering what it was like and speaking as a younger person with, not with the slang but eventually you progressed from memory to acceptance and your maturity shone forth. It is an excellent poem. I can relate to the sadness.
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you are a master of rhyme! great poemyou have penned here. It flowed so effortlessly along your simple use of our great language. I am so glad I clicked on this feature. keep up the great work. you are a delight. peace always in all ways, Kendal
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What a beautiful and tender write. You words left me with the feel that I should continue to cherish the time I have with friends and loved ones because the time we have here is so short. Wonderful work! Congrats on the trophy....well deserved!!
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awww, that was so sweet. i know how you feel. if i lost my best friend, i do not know what i would do. you have my deepest sympathy and respect. thank you very much for entering. it was a wonderful piece.
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Beautiful
Beautiful... That's all that i really can say about this. I loved this part of your poem.
Just two kids without a clue
thinkin our time was still brand new
starin into that sky so blue
never thought our time was through
But there you are
my newest shining star
lookin over me from afar
helping me when times get hard
Now you've ended your timeless war
never once askin for more
and I'll think of these memories
on the banks of sandy white shores
it just worked so beauitfully together. thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. kassie -
Oh, honey... I am very sorry for your loss and I hope you can heal soon. Losing a close friend or relative to the demon of death is so hard to cope with, but I am glad that you've put all of your emotions to such a sad piece. This was a very beautiful song and I definitely think you should record it. I would LOVE to hear this.
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
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thank you so much. I really appreciate your comment and if it is ever recorded, you will be the first to know. Thanks again and thank you for the inspiration. It was much needed.
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Beautiful!!! Do you have music, too? That is so touching, I'll bet someone would love to record it. The only thing I would change is: thinkin our time was still anew---instead of anew, I would say brand new. Maybe Minda would record it. Just a thought
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Beautifuly heartfelt
Hi Miss V. I took the liberty of writing one more stanza to your song,I hope you don't mind.It just came to me."You touched me oh so deeply,
I loved you with words and more,
Now I stand and look to the Heavens,
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I liked your additional stanza very much!
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