My wind up
has wound down.
The robotic behavior ceasing,
no longer being your toy
My body goes limp with devastation
as you sit there and watch me self destruct.
Your ultimate plan coming to fruition
As my face slowly sinks down to the dinner table
I whisper "I love you"
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A contest entry
- Poems Worth Reading#3 PICTURE INSPIRED, Let me feel your emotions!! by Kali-Mus.
450 points, ended February 1, 2007, 11 entries
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Nicely done. Another good take on the picture. I am always interested to see how various people see the same picture and the different forms of inspiration that are derived from it.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance.
Rosemary -
aww the ending is sad, i love short poems that so so much, great job on this, thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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Good =]
I especially love the first two lines. Wound down can be used in various instances. It is often used as "It's time to wind down" to calm children or young adults to rest. But it also invokes thought on how clockwork the lives of people can become, and how we can not simply continue twisting the key in our back to make us do on. Also, I'm not sure if you planned this, but I enjoy the fact that the poem seems to form a triangle. As though no matter which way the windups are placed, eventually they will meet again. Very good, though.
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powerful words
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