You wound me tightly around your slender fingers,
gently kissing my bruises and brushing off my avid promises of love.
I swore it would last forever,
you simply laughed.
Oh cliche me baby
[because I can still taste the sarcasm on your lips]
Under the moonlight sky full of stars,
baby you burnt me out, faster than a firefly.
The little entrails of love that I would allow to slip out of my mouth meant something,
but you would never tell me what.
I missed you///more than you could ever know,
you'd smile and leave laughing messages on my answering machine.
I played them on repeat for hours on end;;
pressing //4's\\ till my fingers began hurting.
[And little did you know...]
With your silly non-poetic words,
you controlled my hopeless heart,
sticking post-it notes with "I ♥ You"s on it.
[I still have them in my back pocket;;]
I slept in the gentle caves of your heart,
tracing my finger along the outline of your picture,
I etched your words into all of my thoughts.
I wrote out all my letters into the sky;;
"To the boy with the confident smile"
you were always the one who knew how to make me laugh.
With our nicotene kisses on the metal rooftops,
we turned the whole couple world to shame,
and made them blush at the insincerity of their 'love'.
We chased butterflies in the fields on rainy days,
and jumped into the liquid avarice puddles,
suffocating us in emotions and drowning us in paper hearts.
You were wound tightly around my heart,
slowly playing with my hair and piling my promises of love in stacks on your dresser.
I swore it would last forever,
you smiled and kissed my neck.
Oh cliche me darling,
[because I can still taste the fire on your tongue]
Author notes
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haha, i hope this is what you were looking for darling. :]
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A contest entry
- I'm not savvy in the love poem department. Inspiration, please :D by wat.
500 points, ended February 4, 2007, 35 entries
Silver trophy winner
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i like it alot i have felt this way so i canr relate. you are a beautiful writer and i hope that you gontinue to write. i wish you the best of luck ... reach for the stars and your dreams will come true
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This is really good.. i liked it.. sry its taking so long to judge the contest.. the break is ending and everything is crazy so thanks for ur patients..
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I really loved these lines "I slept in the gentle caves of your heart,
tracing my finger along the outline of your picture,
I etched your words into all of my thoughts." Just beautiful. So full of wonderful imagery and emotions.
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congrats on the trophies, you earned them! a great piece here. i loved the ending.
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Interesting ending...I really liked it!
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Nice poem. I like how you refered to sleeping in the cave of their heart. Congratulations on winning silver. Great Job. Keep up the good work.
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Thank you love<33
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Congrats on making it to the finalists! I really enjoyed your poem =)
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Aw, yay!
I can't believe I got silver. Thank you love! [:
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Oh cliche me baby
[because I can still taste the sarcasm on your lips]
Genuis lines <3
I loveeeee the last verse. Beautiful poem lovelyface.
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I missed you///more than you could ever know,
you'd smile and leave laughing messages on my answering machine.
I played them on repeat for hours on end;;
pressing //4's\\ till my fingers began hurting.
[And little did you know...]
Oh how I've been there love
your words make my own jealous.
Again I am in awe....
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you read to fast!
I'm trying to chase you around and reply to your comments.
thank you thank you thank you♥
there!
did i beat you yet?
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i absolutely adore your writing.
it's amazing.
&& it reminds me of myself.
you are wonderful.
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"[because I can still taste the sarcasm on your lips]"
I love this line. Just.. the feel of it. Incredible.
"With your silly non-poetic words,
you controlled my hopeless heart,"
and this as well. I just love it. The thought of it, the truth of it!
I absolutely loved this poem. In fact, I think it's one of my favorites. I just went back and read it three times. It's just so reminiscient of everything going on around me lately. Lovely darling. Really.
And also, thank you for your gracious comment on my poem "What Jimmy Eat World, Tom Waits, and a New Beau Can Do to a Girl"
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This was awesome.
I really liked:
"Oh cliche me baby
[because I can still taste the sarcasm on your lips]"
Great write and
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Thank you love♥
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Aww, cuuuute. It has the lyrical thing I was looking for, too [=
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I loved this its as if it took flew right through to the place where everything gets better..
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you are beautiful.
this is beautiful.
i love you.
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i dont know what to say. this poem is absolutley amazing, beautifula dn powerful, everything a poem needs to and can be. i love your imagery and the way you repeated the 'Oh cliche me darling' line. i liked the way you put lines in brackets on the end, especially the last one. keep up the amazing work
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