I can see us in the past
running about having fun
our friendship was fast
then i had to run
the tears i saw,
the pain i caused,
all my fault,
i hear you cry..then pause...
"i'll miss you"
The days go by
and something eating at me
im telling you this before i die
your the one that could see
the real me
I am so sorry truly
a million times tears fell
from tainted to purly
your the one to bring me outta my hell
what i will do for a day with you
you were just so great
our friendship was true
there is no debate
i miss you
As usual i fuck it all to hell
you were my support
without you i fell
your heart...my fort
now im gone from your life
wondering aimlessly confused
even though i have a wife
our souls are still fused
i want u in my life
A contest entry
- You against the world. by Ember Rose.
600 points, ended June 8, 2007, 15 entries
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Comments
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Whoa.
Almost brought a tear to my eye.
I really don't know what else to say about this. The cursing didn't bug me, the bland background didn't bug me.
Great.
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Wow, this was pretty good
As far as i saw it didn't have a distinct stanza pattern, but i don't care. This was good for the reason that I can relate, other than the being married(i'm only 17).
But I can see now, that I will never forget the ones who supported me.
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