Less About a Rock; More About Rot
Under rock: a village of the dead
and almost dead, pungent green
rot gnaws at poisoned sod
moving rocks to merely
give new fodder to mold
a sick union; doubling, tripling
out of control in abhorrent tangle
of love misconstrued
jealousy breaks open strata
as it crawls, clasped claws,
in an upside down warped
way of showing how hurt we are;
gravel and grit bits slide
toward any solid form
and all it touches is tortured
until anything that could take hold,
anything that could take root,
is chewed like a foreign appendage
caught in metal grip. Broken
and festering, it affects and infects
seasons. Even in winter drama
it moves snow and hardens water
that splits rock hard places
a foundation, bricked tight
is crumble-down doubtful
to hold against such yeasty growth
like that of a turned head to approaching kiss;
mouth to unwilling slate,
casual brush on a sharp shoulder,
a nice “No,” and it moves mountains
to hide that refusal to conform
to decrepit habits of hate’s harrowing
Boulder is left broken beyond belief
Author notes
Jealousy - that dragon which slays love under the pretense of keeping it alive.
Havelock Ellis
jpg, Jealousy - Agnolo Bronzino
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A contest entry
- QUOTES by Angels Delight.
500 points, ended January 20, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow that is so very deep you ahve captured what jealousy can really do to a person if they let it control them. It leaves you wanting more and it also makes you think. Great work.
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What an excellent write you have penned here. It is just mighty fine!
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thank you...jealousy is just so much warped love ont he cusp ofbeing gone methinks. Nice of you to visit and comment.
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Wow. That is deep. I could almost see jealousy tainting and destroying a person who lets it take control. I'm going to have to read this a few more times. I don't think I'm getting all of. Great write.
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ah jealousy, as with any emotion, if it is allowed to run without control it will go wild and become destructive. a good piece. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Oh, yes....it eats at you...it is simply easier to let it go. I realized, back when I was cutting some bad ends loose, that to be jealous or angry simply kept me connected..not them or him, but simply me.
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thank you origami shapes. Jealousy is love gone mad for sure.
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There is a large depth to this write if people take the time to read it and ponder it,
wonderful penning leaving a lot for the imagination.
Warm thoughts
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thank you frozentearz, as always, for you kind comments. I am glad it touched you to read it more than once. It takes on its own life then.
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Amazing
I want to say I love hosting contest for one simple reason...To experience such writes as this one...You have definitely taken up my challenge and created a masterpiece in my eyes
I do wish you the best of luck in my contest and I thank you once again for entering
Much Love
Tes
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thank you, Angels Delight, for the insiration and the contest. I aprpeciate, as well, the HM.
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I was so chomping at the bit to make a few changes, but had to wait until you judged. If you look again, a fw uncomfortable places were made more comfotable. Thank you, again.
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My take on this write was one of where you can grab hold of the mind's state when confronted to such difficulites and yet the pen spoke greatly just so the reader can grasp the images. Keep penning
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Yes, to pen of jealousy is to write about how it ruins so many things. Thank you for you comment B.
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"jealousy breaks open strata
as it crawls, clasped claws,
in an upside down warped
way of showing how hurt we are"
Sighhh...Magnificent portrayal of such an insidious, demonic growth...Incredible penning, my Friend...Good luck in the contest, Sweetie... Wanda
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the jealous one is always hurt, in the first place, and that is why it hurts back. tks, gf, for watching over my writing.
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