Amazing...
I am. I know.
Amazing.
Of course I am
I'm perfect - according to my God.
I don't feel Amazing
I don't feel individual
or even particularly loved
And it's my fault
That I don't
'So dearly loved by you'...
So completely hated by me
Hated by evil
Loved by Purity
Take a pick.
And I still can't answer
My own questions
Ever.
This wisdom you say is mine...
It's not.
Because I can't act on it
Use it to live my life
The way that You want me to
This isn't the first or the last time
That I have resorted to writing
Writing my world
On paper
...the girl that writes the world
Can't even control her own.
Those 'Merciless Emotions'
Let me live.
At least one day I can be 'that girl'
I'll be 'Pretty In The Darkness'
Because all I had to do,
was say 'No.'
'Let Go'
That 'Worthless' girl
Then maybe, I won't be empty.
Author notes
'Merciless Emotions'
'Pretty In The Darkness'
'No.'
'Let Go'
'Worthless'
References to other writes
Please tell me what you think
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Full of it
btw urnot good at writin poems and ur certainly not perfect,no one is so get a grip darlin -
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perhaps you have a serious lack of understanding. you require a depth and want to seek beyond the superficial layer of thought to really understand what i have written. instead, you have decided to rip me off. you have not at all given me and constructive adivce at all, but simply said that i was crap. perhaps you could consider the trophies on my page? not to mention the fact that no-one is perfect, hence the fact that i don't write a fantastic piece of literature every time i sit down with a pen. please learn to be constructive and monitor what you say. it may come back to bite you.
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Not good!
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Oh. This is an interesting little poem that you have going here.
I think that it is great that you express yourself in some way. Even if it's only writing. And I think that it's ok if we don't always feel in control or know what we're doing. I think that's just our time to rest and figure it out. I think you did a good job of expressing yourself though. 
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Great write.
I really liked:
"'So dearly loved by you'...
So completely hated by me."
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Simple, and very well written.
I have to say that I love simple poems like this. Well, simple with a deep meaning. It's beautiful.
~Zoe
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