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With a Heavy Sigh

Lump in her throat again as she starts her day
Her reflection pains her as time as dimmed her youthful glow
Remembering the image etched in her mind of her younger self

she shakes her head to get back to the present as she readies
herself for the long day ahead

She finishes brushing her hair, teeth and puts on a little powder
Applies a light pink lip color to make her look alive
Then she smiles a fake smile just to see what others see in her
Immediately disappointed she frowns and throws the lipstick into the sink
seeming to blame it for everything

As she escapes the image in the mirror she puts effort in forgetting it as her life is more than images these days
she does forget it..........eventually

She gets a call from her daughter which gives her comfort
and she doesn't feel as lonely
But reminds her of the daughter she hasn't heard from in
months and feels the ache in heart for her
Vulnerability consumes her and she says a prayer to ease the worry

 

She has given her entire life for her children and theirs
She hasn't felt the strong arms of a love in such a long time
Is worry and loneliness her reward for total dedication, loyalty and selflessness?

 

Where is her prince now?  When will her knight in shining
armour rescue her? But then how is she to be rescued from herself?
No need to complain as this is her life as she made it....as she allowed it to be,

 

and then....

 

With a heavy sigh; she accepts it all again...

Love of a man wasn't in the requirements for happiness

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  • Creek Indian Babe
    July 25, 2007

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    I love your work cuz. This is beautiful sweetie, I didn't know you had it in you. Nicely done..Lol 2 U

    • acytra
      July 27, 2007
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      Sad but I am sure she felt this way, and it breaks my heart to think that. But she gave her whole life for us.


  • Namita
    July 21, 2007

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    Very-well written. Especially the last lines. They are very powerful and really well-done. I congratulate you on the silver obtained in a contest and wish you good luck in mine.

    Luv,
    Candy
    Contest Holder


  • bittersweet tears
    July 15, 2007
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    wow

    Beautifully written. Very sad. Yet also very true. Great penning. Keep it up!

  • ASPMproprietrix
    July 15, 2007

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    I enjoy poems like this, more in story form with not distinct, rhymic stanza's. These kind are more free flow. I especially like your use of font (i.e. italics) to emphasize certain words and also punctuation, such as your ..., to help the reader interpret the poem correctly. It's something not as many writers do. Good luck in the contest .


  • Myjoy gold member
    April 3, 2007
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    A great and heart felt write. Well done. Good luck in the contest.


  • kitcat5600
    March 7, 2007

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    this is so sad and serene at the same time. the part about applying the makeup is so descriptive and touching, "Applies a light pink lip color to make her look alive
    Then she smiles a fake smile just to see what others see in her." ive often looked in the mirror and wondered what anyone sees in me. this really captures the way many people probably feel. Great write! keep it up!


  • silent bee
    March 7, 2007

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    tear-jerker

    this is so beautiful! it literally has brought a tear to my eye. and excellent job with this. i love the way it was written: the flow, the choice of words...my favorite line "Is worry and loneliness her reward for total dedication, loyalty / and selflessness?" well written. and the last line also! great write...i absolutely loved it! i have a new bookmark!

    ~b*e*e~


  • slipperssun gold member
    February 23, 2007

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    she gets a call from her daughter which gives her comfort
    Doesn't feel as lonely
    But reminds her of the daughter she hasn't heard from in
    months

    it is sad how we give and give and in the end it seems like they dont care... i hope one day soon you pick up the phone to find her on the other end... this is a beautiful write... so full of honesty. well done
    cheers
    Jen


  • Phineas Red
    January 21, 2007
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    The last line was a killer.


  • grassisgreener
    January 13, 2007

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    "Then she smiles a fake smile just to see what others see in her"

    You present such bare-boned honesty in this poem. I honestly think that any woman, of any age, can relate to the feelings of the woman in this poem. The resignation, and disatisfaction with life as she knows it to be, hits the target on the bulls eye. fantastic.


  • FreeSpiritedSoul
    January 12, 2007

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    hey this is a rele good poem, alot of emotion and complex langauge. . . you word were very beautiful and touchinng. . . keep up the work i will be bak to read more of you work
    FreeSpiritedSouls


  • Cannonsfire
    January 12, 2007
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    Awesome journey you give us with a glimpse in the life and the path through life of this woman. Very visual and so well written, flowed well and you feel every line with your siwdom and poignant reminders.


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    January 12, 2007

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    Ohhhhhhhhhhhh...........that is just terrible! Your poem is powerful, full of feelings, and so much sorrow all through out. The last line sums it all up very well and just made me resonate within my consciousness that I do need the love of a man and I must now on resonate and repeat this daily to draw this closer. Thank you for making me realise this.

    Good use of assonance and alliteration in the poem. Your imagery is vivid, clear and speaks abundantly of the woman you created here.

    All the best and congrats on the silver.
    Charishma


  • wishintreeUK
    January 12, 2007

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    A fantastic piece of work. This could be a mirror of life for so many women who give their lives to looking after and putting their family first in their lives with nothing in return... especially that which she needs most of all... the love, understanding and support of her man.

    BRILLIANT!

    ~Katie:


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    January 11, 2007

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    I love that heavy sigh...and love this beautifully round character for it....

    it is exactly how the mind seems to wander through thoughts.....love it!


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    January 11, 2007
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    This is a sad, heartfelt poem. I didn't care for the .... between thoughts. I think it took away from the rhythm of the poem. But I can see this woman. She reviews her life and it wasn't what she had planned. But still she goes on with each new day.

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