With this pain
To sharp to sugarcoat
And this misery
To plain-sighted for a anti-dote
I've made a choice
To clearly voice
My deepest apologies
I am sorry that this is the end
I am sorry there was ever a beggining
I am sorry I asked you to lend
A helping hand, and you werent willing
Im sorry you had to watch me fall
Repeatedly leaving me to crawl
I am sorry you felt the need to abuse
Im sorry we met at all
For with this pain to sharp to sugarcoat
And this misery to real for an anitidote
I pray you find the strength to forgive
As I complete this one last suicide note
I just have no ambition to live
I feel the sun will rise
But not for me
Days will turn to years in light and warmth
But I am bound to darkness eternally
You will be fine
Dont bother with symantics and destruction
I pray you dont walk that line
For it is dangerous and life altering
Just look what its done to mine
I feel as if I owe you something
Something thatwouldve made us one
Heres back the engagement ring
Please love and care for our son
I hope you know what youve done to me
Such abuse over the years
I pray that when you see
My blood, it brings you many tears
So heres my deepest apologies
As my death finally nears
I've written them all down for you
In dark black ink
So no matter what you do
I'll make sure you never forget
All you've done that makes you
My only 'while-dying' regret
PS- fuck you
for all you've done to me and put me through.
Author notes
Bleeding Eternal
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A contest entry
- completely anything you want! NO RULES WHAT~SO~EVER! by ibsons hysops.
1000 points, ended May 30, 2007, 65 entries
Honorable mention
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Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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This is deep and filled with emotion through out the whole poem. Its sad but a wonderful write. I'm sorry that somebody has done wrong to you like that. Good Job.
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really strong emotion. Dark and pretty at the same time.
good luck in my contest.
O.X
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Wow, who ever this was really did you no good, I'm sorry to see a love go to ruins. You did a great job expressing the emotions, and very good luck on the contest.
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Wow, a brilliant poem, the flow is wonderful and the vocabulary is great. I really like this poem, its beautiful and sad at the same time.
Great job and good luck in the contest!
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Lovely. Well done. I like the language used
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This piece is so dark, deep, and beautiful in a sad way. Your emotions have come out vividly through detailed words. I have sensed some slight imagery, as well as pain. Abuse does hurt and it corrupts us in ways, but we can get through it if we try hard enough. I especially loved the P.S. LOL! It sounds like when my ex wanted a break and 10 people(who really lied and I believed them) told me he was cheating on me with 3 girls...I answered the phone and said "Fuck you! Waste your breath on your other three girlfriends!"....I hung up, but before I did, I heard him take a deep breath like...whoa....I regret those words and have talked to him since...but when you hear you've been cheated on from 10 people, you have reason to get that emotional. I only wish I would have believed him first....seeing as I still love him, I really wish I could take back those words.
Well, I wish you the best and hope that you haven't been through this all...but if you have, I wish you the best in getting through it! I'm here if you ever need to talk. Keep up the great work, thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest! -
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Thank you, I appreciate your comment. wow..sounds like that must have been pretty dramatic and harsh to hear...I have had a somewhat similar expereience. It hurts when we hear that our partner has cheated and been with someone else in such a way...Sounds too me like it was baically miscommunication, along with lies from other people. I have learned that its not worth it to listen to other people when they say things...no matter who it is, i believe it is better to ask the person who is at fault (apparently) and find the truth there. Maybe you can talk with this man of yours again, u never know, he may just be thinking the same thing
Thank you and no, this has not happened too me. But the abuse part has, and the attempted suicide has. I really appreciate your comment. Thank you muchly. Hope to hear back from you
Much luv,
Courtney
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Wow! This is indeed Complete Corruption of the Soul!!!! Good Luck in the Contest!!!
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well this was very emotional and also very good and i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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wow, you did a amazing job on this! If/when I kill myself this would be a great suicide note! It was beautiful and flowed perfectly! Good luck in my contest!
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WOW!
This was harsh at the end. .lol but I loved it. Does that make me morbid? lol Excellent work. Fuck you. That just sums it up doesn't it? lol you've done an excellent job. Thank you for entering and the best of luck to you. Kassie
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i really like it i might not have much to say because ive just commented about 17 poems lol but i know this poem rocks my socks! its sad and i feel the emotion you put toward thi, its a great poem and i wish you the best of luck in my contest, keep up the awesome work!
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i have nothing to say for real....lots of emotions,good write.
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wow!! this is powerful as well! i felt this way once with my ex! question....did you really have a baby with him? well....GREAT WRITE!!!! and good luck in your contest!! love ya!! Amanda
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awww thanks. and no, we did not. but we had a scare for a while. :S
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