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Flesh painted stairs

  stained in rouge tones

     speak in silent whispers

of behind closed doors

 

Silken sash

    strangles sleek flesh

obscuring views

   of fingerprinted jugular

 

Hazel eyes hide

    beneath alcoholic make up

forcibly worn

    behind shaded lens

 

Swaddled in shrouding attire

              worn through winter's frost

        and summer sweltering rays,

cloak obscene cicatrices inflicted

 

Historic indignities

    lie masked by fabrications

lost in chicken scratch

      folder two inches thick

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  • troyias
    January 23, 2007

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    Wonderful

    Throughly enjoyed this. the flow was fluid and filled with emotions. beautifully written.

    Thanks for entering this contest. Good Luck.

    *Go with God*

    Valerie


  • Frogzter gold member
    January 22, 2007
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    Some very vivid imagery in this piece. I am amazed at all the different thoughts and emotions these pics evoke in the poets on this site. Your perspective is unique and fresh! Best wishes in the contest.
    Frogz~


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    January 14, 2007

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    i loved the pic and wish you luck in the contest but don't think you'll need this as this write was just perfect i loved the wording and the structure, the flow and emotion.....keep writting!


  • Blazing White Wolf
    January 11, 2007

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    this as stated is a deep look into self with some stark images and view points which can be quite relateable to many well done My lioness

    Love,
    Master

  • deleteit
    January 10, 2007

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    This is a deep write and I totally relate. You did great at describing your personal reflections.

    You are far better at words than I am. Good luck in the contest!


  • B Chandler
    January 10, 2007

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    Chills

    this is scarely deep but at the sametime holds that aspect of what the inner you think/looks from another perspective view. Keep it coming

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