She seeps undetected into your soul,
smiling so sweetly soft & gentle she flows.
On waves of passionate emotions intense,
yet ever so beguiling in charms immense.
With genteel persuasion of blameless intent,
if standing accused she'll tear in lament.
A demure finger wraps around the heart,
till you're quite overwhelmed unable to part.
Unmatched sensual Goddess deluxe as a lover,
inspiring passion's deep as yet undiscovered.
A fierce temperament when waging battles,
explosively fearsome leaving you addled.
She believes in creation's much higher power,
sending up prayers against those darkest hours.
An innocent child,a mother lover and friend,
the best of soul's reach on which you can depend.
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I am thinking a-loud i-n silence shh..she infects my mind over and over/ this is amazing suseann.
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Wow that was so very lovely and it flows together so perfectly. Great work. The words oyu've chosen are just simple spectacular. Wow!!
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oh, wow, that is so beautiful. i love this piece because it could be describing one special woman or every woman to some degree or another great write!
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Unbelievable
Wow. It flowed beautifully. I love it. Amazing!
Guin
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Very Nice!
This piece is absolutely lovely! Can't say enough good things about it . . .
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VERY NICE
This is just an awesome write. It's vocabulary is to die for. I so enjoyed reading and commenting on it for you. I like it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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"She" by Charles Aznavour was one of my favourite songs of the 70`s. You have carried on the sentiment here,although I could not exactly match your lines to the song`s metre. Perhaps that`s me.
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Thanks to all for commenting.
And a very heart felt special thanks to whom ever was the generous soul that spotlighted it for me. Thank you!~~Suseann -
Wow, the imagery in this piece is written so well. great job here....
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this is a great write...i love the feel and imagrey awesome job
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Beautiful write suseann! I like the texture you have given this almost as if it were alive!
The pic is nice too. yet the poem has many a traveled meaning, fair in it's depth and beauty.
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Oh, this is so very beautiful. I shall have to try out the music background to it, but your words sing so well and tell a wonderful story.
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beautifully written...what else is there to say
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Well,I can say thank you for one.Thank you!
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Makes you lose yourself in the texture of the words.
Very nice imagery, expresses how deep the human emotion can go. Very nice write.
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Wow, this is exceptional! Sensual and soft at the same time. The rhyme is impeccable and the flow wonderful as well. Nice imagery to boot! This one has it all! I especially like the last stanza... it brought it all together rather nicely! Thanks for sharing and best wishes! Blessings,
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beautiful
your poem touched my soul,it flows through you leaving you warm inside, with a sensual twist.
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Thank you,then it says what it was intended to.And I appreciate your comment.
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it has been way too long that I have read anything by you, and I must say I am glad that I took the time for this one. Powerful is how it comes across in the soft and sensual ways of this Goddess that you refer to. And hearing Charles Aznavour is an added plus. All my best in this contest,
xoxoxoxo
reenie
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A seldom heard song for the perfect lover - without judgement. Borders on nymphdom, yet holds a candle up to anybody. Bravo!
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AWESOME!!!!
WOW! This just takes my breath away Passionate words and a sensual and beautiful picture.
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Very good picture and poem
This was one that I appreciated and I have my doubts in that kind of love. I really liked the flow and was blown away at how the words mixed and made you feel. Very beautiful. Job well done.
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Perfection!
Ah she,who lives in my heart!
in my thoughts each moment we're apart
to meet this dream I waited my life
the girl I met,now my wife...
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Maybe because as I understand it this poem was not only image but song-inspired, the song that came to mind as I read this poem was Billy Joel's "Always A Woman."
If there's anyone that I know can write a rhyming poem without it sounding the least bit forced or contrived, it's YOU, and though a lot of the off-slant rhymes really do this so well, it's a lot of talent and a lot of talent I love reading!
Best wishes in the contest!
Jo
P.S.: Since I'm not certain how the Contest-Host perceives using names in comments, I haven't referred to you even ONCE by name, but you know who I mean!
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A very beautiful piece, so powerfully passionate. Good luck to you in this contest... x Butterfly.
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Very nicely done
I was impressed by the passion in this poem. You have a couple of grammatical mistakes, very minor. In Line 10 it should be "you're" instead of "your". In line 15 creation is possessive and should be creation's. This is the Goddess I aspire to be. -
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Beautifully done,
with passion and powerful allusions.. We are definitely IT! 
That song really fits and will complement this lovely poem so perfectly too
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Such a beautiful and powerful poem. You have defined your character well. I am very impressed with your poem. good luck in the contest
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wow..this was powerful..it gave me shivers because I can really relate personally to this piece..the best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari
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