The beauty of a tranquil night,
a dream that will keep you awake.
The moon on heaven shine alight,
leonids in a misty lake.
Fragments of a planet apiece,
like pieces of a heart in ache.
In such a place I feel at peace,
leonids in a misty lake.
Expect that it won't happen soon,
a trip around the sun they take.
It happens once in a blue moon,
leonids in a misty lake.
© Jim T. Henriksen
January 10th, 2007
Author notes
I was searching for images on google, with themes like mist, moon, mystic, moonlight, etc. (for my friend misticmoonlite), and found this wonderful picture above. It is taken as the leonids pass the moon, and you can even see reflection of the leonids in the lake. This image the passing of the "leo", lionslove, and the "mist", misticmoonlite, hanging in there, fighting for her life in the hospital.
The resulting poem did however turn out to be about the leonids in a misty lake... Hope you enjoy it though.
In a list
A contest entry
- "MisticMoonlite " Remembered by LovinCharmer.
900 points, ended January 20, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best of 2007: Rhymed/Formed Poetry by B Chandler.
1000 points, ended January 1, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
This is just beautiful and your references to the leonids makes me smile. One of the best meteor showers of the season each year. Well at least for a little while.
very very nice. Beautifully visual. Would love to see the image you found though. Glad to see an award on this delightful piece. Kyrielle is one of my favorite forms..... ~Pamela 
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Well,
http://www.phys.ncku.edu.tw/~astrolab/mirrors/apod/image/0211/LeonidOfTheLake_suddeth.jpg is the place I found the image which accompanied this poem once. It is sad that it will be years till we will see the leonids in such a magnificence as we did in 2006. I am pleased that you enjoyed this little Kyrielle. Thanks for the comment, and the applause, it means a lot to me! 
Jim
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Opinion
Poetry should be seen as read in such a manner, that its reader cannot help but to be engulf- enfused with the very words or lines that have somehow stick out and therefore stamped into memory. The images for this is as if you are relaying a story of some kind about this body of water and the 'individual' about it. -
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I am not entirely sure if this is positive or negative comment, it is kind of a neutral 'opinion'. Not that it is anything wrong with neutral opinion, but I don't get the feeling if you liked it or not.
Thanks for your opinion though, I appreciate it! Jim
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This indeed was an awesome piece, I am actually taken back by this one. Thanks so much for sharing your talent. I love the form here too.
Impressive...and my dear Lionslove and mysticmoonlite...In prayers always.
Tory
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Thanks Tory!
I appreciate your kind words, I still feel sadness for loosing my good friend Tim, aka. Lionslove. Linda, aka. mysticmoonlite, got very sick, and almost died, but everyone prayed for her, and she pulled through, thanks God! Thanks for commenting, and for the applause!
Jim
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GOOD
"this wonderful picture above" This picture is not there now. Good poem. Like the rhyme.
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Well,
there WAS a picture there, but as my gold membership wore off, it is no longer shown. As soon as I upgrade my membership, it will reappear. I think however that the poem itself paints the picture in your mind, can you see it? Thanks for the comment, and the applause! Jim
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How does one describe this poem...it took my breath away. I saw such peace and beauty in it.
Your writing amazes me!..
Thank you for sharing your beautiful words!
debbie
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Thanks Debbie
for your wonderful comment, and your heartwarming applauses. They say a good poem paint a picture in the readers mind, and alas, as my gold membership ended, they took away the picture that I had at the top. You can still imagine the picture though... right? Jim
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Jim..my sweet brother. this poem is so beautiful. thank you for sharing it with us.. my recovery is going to take 5 months at least please bear with me as i am soooo slow..again thank you..Linda
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Wonderful
to see you recovering a little, atleast so much that you can now rest in your own bed. I'm happy you liked my poem. I don't mind not getting a trophy, your approval is worth more than gold. Thanks for the comment, and the applauses! Jim
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Outstanding Piece
Outstanding..what a nice tribute to Linda. It is written with the excellence of a true poet. Please enter this in the contest I Have for her"MisticMoonlite Remembered"..I am in the process of makeing a portfolio of all the well wishers, and people that wrote some beautifull poems for her. I can't promise you a trophy at this time, but I feel this piece is worthy for her to see..Thank You...Andy..Lindas "LovinCharmer"
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Thank you,
I've entered the poem into your contest now. I don't care about any trophy, though I would be happy if I got one. My reward is that you may put this in the portfolio of poems for Linda, so she may read it when she gets better. What is the latest news? I am so worried for her... Jim
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Jim, this is beautiful. I had to read it like 5 times, and every time it got stronger and stronger. This is one of the most prettiest ones I have read here on AP my friend, I loved it! And I still keep her in my prayers dear brother. Your friend always...GETS
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Thanks Gary,
I noticed aswell that as I reread my poem, it was deeper than I first attempted it. Sometimes I feel I should analyze my own poems, maybe I could get some answers... Thanks for the comment, and the applauses, it means a lot to me. Thank you, my friend! Jim
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So sorry to hear your friend is in the hospital ,you've sure penned a beauty of a piece for her - love the form with the repetition of the last line in each stanza - perfectly suited to the image.
Enjoyed this,
Bravo,
galfalfa
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Hi, gal!
Long time no see! I have not heard any further news yet, but I pray Linda is getting better. My heart would be crushed if I lost another friend... Thanks for the comment, and the applause, I appreciate it! Jim
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The combination of night, moon light and mist are a wonderful, mysterious mix to create the perfect tranquility which you have captured so beautifully with your words. The image is captivating
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Thanks, Lily!
Thank you for your wonderful words, and your heartwarming applauses! I thank you from the bottom of my heart! Jim
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Beautiful bro!
Jim, You have me in tears with such a heartfelt tribute for two people that grace or have graced our wonderful site. Your words so soft and flowing bring peace to the heart as one reads on. The rhythm and rhyme are superb and create the perfect flow. Thank you for sharing the gift of your pen with all of us and I will leave you with a standing ovation to go along with my applause, per usual. Love and God bless from your sis, Joyce 
P.S. Love and hugs for the family also bro!!!!!!!
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Hi, Joyce!
Though the poem did not come out as a poem about Linda, I guess it still turned out as a tribute, both to her, and to Tim. I was as usual unsure about the quality, but you have assured me that I managed to make yet another good poem. Thank you a million for your wonderful comment, the standing ovation, and the three applauses! You are too kind! 
Hugs to you and your husband. Love from your bro, your sis-in-law, and your nephew. Jim
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you know as i read this i keep returning to the picture and i looked it it til it was painted in my mind coming alive with each form of word you had, this is a great poem keep it flowing
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Hi, Aron!
Yes, I guess the image was catching the eye, and I hoped to be able to paint the image with my words. Thanks for letting me know I succeeded, and thanks for your comment! Jim
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Beauty of Nature
It's a beautiful poem you have penned my dear. You have indeed captured the beauty of the shinning moon through the night & it's definitely a place where we can find peace and hope this peace stays on earth through eternity. Very nicely written poem with nice flow and tone of serenity of mother nature is well expressed.
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Namaste!
Thank you for your wonderful poem, BitterCandy. In this world of war, there is thankfully still some places that will remain peaceful forever. Your applause is warming my heart... Jim
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