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Thrown Out

The sound of the wind blowing outside startled me,

we had a chance to leave.

My family and I decided to stick it out,

but little did we know.

The storm outside was violent,

and we never thought about how bad this would be.

The first thing to go was the electric,

then the stove.

All food was slowly thawing.

Outside things grew worse.

Through our bordered up windows we could see black.

The thunder sounded beautiful and so did the rain.

During the night,

asleep in my bed,

I felt water next to me.

I was waste deep in water,

tredging up the stairs for higher ground

everything I worked so for now was ruined.

As I sat holding my love,

The hardest thing for us was,

seeing a picture of our family float by.

The water rising now up to our chins,

We knew we'd never make it.

The storm was over,

and copters flew,

we knew we needed to escape.

We swam to the window and climbed out on the roof.

Look for help and praying for safety,

we realized this was the end,

Just then a boat pulled next to our roof.

Took us to salvation.

We were thrown out.

Author notes

TO ALL THOSE AFFECTED BY HURRICANE KATRINA!!!!

A contest entry

he he he he I tried! he he he he

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  • Delrondu
    January 29, 2007

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    lol first let me apologise. not taking away your dreadful experience with Katrina and all but i'm sorry i didn't like that for a few reasons. the flow, the words used ... i mean i get that you're telling a story but it just feels really raw and very on-the-surface and there isnt really anything i can grasp onto. thanks for taking the effort to enter though. appreciate that.

    oh and i think you meant 'waist' deep instead of 'waste'.

  • XendlessloveX
    January 16, 2007
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    Intellectual

    I really feel how this write is working. It seems of importance but almost like a story. Its very interesting, I have to say.....you really are a great writer. Ttyl

    Love Always
    XendlessloveX


  • Delrondu
    January 10, 2007
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    thank you for entering but please refer back to the rules again or this has no chance.


  • captaincrazy
    January 10, 2007

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    this is really good. and that was a nice thing to dedicate this to all the victims. great poem. and good luck in the contest!!!


  • XExpressed LoveX
    January 10, 2007
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    Excellent!!

    Man...Brooklyn thats a Really Good Poem. Check out 4 of my New Ones I wrote. Thx a Bunch

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