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The-
start of a
new freedom-
is the simple vision
of Hope for all, of God. The
one prudence born, of the fruitful meditation
of His soul, softly, and simply, spoken. The tender
desire, found through the weary eyes ... the one
sweet emotion awaiting the humbled soul that has
been made certain, and is willing, and ready to remain,
now and forever open. For the willing heart lays open to
what struggle and strife this life, may bring, for the willing
are patient and aware of the awesome blessings that will come,
in this certain time of opportunity. For freedom for all is granted by
God and given the eyes to see the great passion of His Heart, rising and
forever evolving in the emotion of this Grace, and is brought through Gods
Hope to rise to this position, all through a life lived openly for all, and for the
one. As it is seen to be one love sown in peace. The one condition of His that
is sown for all the soul, through the standard and goodness of Jesus' peaceful
words of mercy. Found in the steady advance and revealed moreover, in the
nature of this, His devotion for all, shown through the perfection of His love
in faith ... and so, freedom is found, and does rest in measure, solely upon
the given surrender, the complete abandon to be found within the open
heart of the broken ... will ... so it is a willing devotion ... given the very
sight this season to see ... and the mind to dream. To take a jaunt upon
the merry winds of this gracious opportunity. For the peaceful pardon
and certain reasoning for this season ... is the one blessing given and
given for all ... of the Fathers foremost desire. Seen by me now to be
the perfect love offered here to me as well, and moving through the
spirit of His wayward hopes emotion. The tender grace ... born of His
chance, and granted for all, and so it is intended to be, a simple
adaptation. Alive and well and abundantly thriving, within the
heart of a new born child. To be alone, picked up by Him and
swept away, alive and wandering free. Tossed about and around
within the hands of the many winds of peace, and so away goes
the gentle chipper leaf, sent adrift, and amid the fall, apart
from the day of the perfect warmth shown to him in the
beauty and simpler days of his youth. For when to look upon
that day just as he was then quickened in the spring now his
spirit wandering is found again, recalling the scene. As now
he is a new hope for me taken aloft the care and gentle notions
of God and aloof the hearty welcome of the breeze. A ways apart
from the one so tender ... the ever tender timber tree. While
the love of the Father ... for him will sew a new place in His
heart as well, as will I, I know ... a perfect home. For I have
been granted the eyes to see. That yes, freedom
knows well these standards of the open heart,
and stands patiently in the shadows of its' wisdom,
and remains in the noble persuit of their perfection.
The ever tender nature sown of honesty and love
and humility, and faith, as it is this peaceful
vision, born anew for all each day, of
God's, Almighty Grace,
and now-
in view-
and amid-
the-essence-
of His light-
this graceful-
dance of this-
peaceful heart,
has come to see-
that in the end,
this freedom,
really never falls far ...
far from the breadth;- of the tree. ~
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Author notes
~ For "Hope Angel"!
~ God has you Hope Angel... May you find peace in knowing this... That this is just another opportunity for a heart that is willing and open to grow within this season of change... ~
Love: ~ James ~
A contest entry
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800 points, ended November 27, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Magnify The Lord!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! by Talking Toni.
1000 points, ended March 31, 2008, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - On Golden Pond by BluRosePoet8488.
1750 points, ended April 29, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 'New Beginnings' by Cynthia Gaines.
1500 points, ended September 21, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites! NEW writes! I Want It All! by lesbian-in-love.
700 points, ended October 22, 209 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please let me know how it makes you feel, and the insight that it gave you... if any!
Comments
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This was very interesting to read. Flowed nicely. I enjoyed reading this. It was well written. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.
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wonderful job
thank you
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artistically it is a visual beauty for the eyes and heart to
read!
well done James!
well done!
ears/Seattle
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Wow... you're WAY better than me...
I knew this was a masterpiece right from the beginning. You just use words in a way I find impossible, and for you it just somehow works perfectly. It's so beautiful. Once again, I am not worthy XD You're amazing. Brilliant work.
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Thank you for entering my contest...
I appreciate your taking the time to write this thoughtfully penned poem from the heart. Best of luck to you in the contest!!! Peace, Cyn 
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thank you so much
and as i said God does give hope and much of it
an di think it was very amazing to shape your poem like it is'
thank you so much for entering
and good luck -
*sigh*
This made me sick to my brain. Disgusting. Love of god? What god? why did you enter this in my contest? It's horrible, this contest is for anti-religion. Did you read the rules? Why write this religous garbage? ahh damn get out. -
nicely penned with a wonderful message. Well done.
Rory -
This poem has a beautiful messages within its lines that reveals the true grace of God. I really like it and the way that you have presented it as a tree, as in the tree of knowledge. Beautifully done. Thank you for sharing. Keep the ink flowing and good luck!
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This poem has a beautiful messages within its lines that reveals the true grace of God. I really like it and the way that you have presented it as a tree, as in the tree of knowledge. Beautifully done. Thank you for sharing. Keep the ink flowing and good luck!
~Donna~
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Excellent Write Brother.
What a talent, and how you weave poetry so well.
Thanks for sharing, peace, and take care brother.
-Timothy
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This is definately a good poem. Not quite what I was looking for. I too agree that this isn't really a poem of imagery. However, a marvelous write just the same. I did enjoy the style. It was odd. Unfortunately, that was all that stood out to me. Perhaps I am biased, being agnostic and all, but it just didn't hit me the way something I'm looking for would. Thank you for your interest in my contest though.
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well, I can honestly agree with the original contest host that this is not a poem of imagery, rather of religious fervor.
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This is just Amazing
So beautiful and so very deep as our Lord is as well in his word and in relationship to us. You wrote an excellent poem and I feel honored as a fellow believer to have read your poem in magnifying our Lord. Thank you for the entry and best of luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your heart and gift from our Lord to write poetry with me.
Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is very deep and beautiful and a loving account of God's love for us and how he carries of through the seasons of change very good imagery and just a lovely presence to it!!!! Thanks for your entry and the best of lucl in the contest!!!~~Toni~~ -
Thanks for sharing this emotional piece. Lots to process.
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its a beautiful write but its not for my contest.. i am sorry but i wanted some beautiful imagery. try again later with some other contest
dont be upset okay! i really liked your write
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Thank you for your entry
The depth and scope of this was far reaching and a little daunting. Had this been the only poem I had to read today, I would have taken more time to explore all that it had to offer. As it is, I do not have that time to spend. I will say that this is a message many need to hear and I thank you for sharing it with us.
God Bless and Merry Christmas
Tammy
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Sounds more like a manifesto of God's glory than a poem. Then again, many passages from the Bible are idylls that possess quite moving imagery. I have digressed.
How in the hell can I critique this poem? Yes it is emotionally stirring (to the faithful, anyway). There are no grammatical or mechanical errors that cannot be contributed to poetic diction and decision.
How can I critique this poem based on its subject content alone? Well, I could start by saying there is a lack of imagery, a lack of personification, a lack of simile and metaphor and other creative poetic devices. But--
There is raw emotion, and an intensity found usually in the devout. Oh well, can't have it all can we?
How's this...What would you like to find out about your poem from the view of the reader -
thank you for sharing your faith and devotion in a poetic manner with us all ... a beautiful way of communion of likeminded hearts ... may all who read your words find peace and serenity ...
maa
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Peace and blessings upon you. This was a really good poem. Much luck to you in all the contests you've entered this in.
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*hug*
yes, love the changes and really enjoyed this poem and the peacefull feel it greated in regards to the Festive season!!! Thank you -
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Wow, very long, but very nice! I love how sophisticated it sounds, but it's also comforting. Good job, and thank you for entering!
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Very well penned!
Thanks for a wonderful entry.
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Excellent indeed
Loved it and you have such an understanding of love in its purest form .Never overlook the purity of thoes around you for they to have branches that needs your nurture 1-3 i give you a 4 -
A wonderful write about my favourite subject...just lovely and so very touched by the Holy Spirit.x
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Beautiful write
So true this is for as the gift of a child is given so be the gift of that parent returned through locve anf guidance for his return to the maker within heaven above
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You are one of the few prose writers whom I support on this website! Thanks for this lovely entry!
Becks
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You have visited my work and left wonderful comments; comments that brought a smile to my face so I simply had to come to read your work. I’m a formal poet and I don’t write prose in fact I don’t usually enjoy reading it. You may have changed my point of view; I found this captivating. The honesty and wisdom expressed in this piece tells me a plethora about you the poet and person and I am very impressed. Your faith in God and your understanding of his nature is so very evident and that impresses me very much. I am and have always been one who sees a man standing his tallest when he is on his knees. Happy Thanksgiving, God bless you and keep your faith.
Love,
Amera♥
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Lovely write!
Thank you very much for entering the contest James!
it had a peacefull feel to it and I really enjoyed reading your poem! ;-)
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Beautiful.I embrace your words of knowledge and wisdom.God is truely glorious.He braght to you the flowing words that so beatifully portays.You are blessed with an unique ability of portraying what is and what will always be.Thank you so much for the oppurtunity of reading this fine,fine piece of writing.Never give it up.Michaeline
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Your sincerity shines through every piece you write. You don't paint pictures with words you paint murals. I don't think I have ever met anyone who has more conviction of their beliefs than you. Including people of the cloth. Are you trying to rewrite the bible or what?
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A beautiful heartfelt write. Inspirational. Lovely imagery, flow and tone. Excellent word choice. Strong alliteration. You paint a picture of the character of God and His relationship to those who have come to know Him. There is freedom in Him, His grace sets one free in God's ever present love.
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This is a very moving write keep on writing
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James, as I've already told you, I feel this is a truly inspirational piece! It is a profound realization. It flows with a grace and beauty as it's read. Lovely write!!
~Lori
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