Souls shining so bright yet love we feel is in darkness
So dark, that it consumes my heart and makes it bleed
My love for you has brought pain yet upon theres no wound
Hearts love bleeding non the less like a devilish deed
Shadow dripping, spawned by the very devil himself
soul has memory of light now fears no darkness
It learnt from a book from the devils shelf
And so with tools of darkness feels no pain
Scaring wound of knowledge in tainted reflection
Every time we remember your light, of question
Love so dark Why? soul we shine is bright
Did your beauty so bright, shine on another?
Did this love you feel have so much might?
Did it fill your love with an endless fight?
Is this why my soul burned out its light?
And with answers of darkness I know
Some where true light must shine for me
In heart and shadow
Author notes
ahh my first highskwel sweety (turned out to be an Absolute s**t) so intense in those times ahh smile in old tears
A contest entry
- January New Members Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended February 15, 2007, 120 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thanks for entering
The pain of teenage love is far more intense than when we get older. We feel harder, love harder and hate harder. That pain cuts so deep we feel we cannot breath yet tomorrow we stand up and move on.
You have written this pain and love well into this poem and painted a good picture with the imagery you have used.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
A warm welcome to All Poetry!
an intense poem all around - but I think you relay your emotions nicely to the reader
Thank you for entering the contest
I wish you luck and welcome you to All Poetry!
abscessed
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The darkness of a high shool love can be brief, beautiful and beastial all in the same breath. Too young to know the nuances of love yet old enough to know the ache they can cause with the merest slight of the tongue. I see you are pretty new on here, I like your style, hope to see more of your penning. It's good for the soul
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Thank you for your entry and welcome to Allpoetry!
Lol @ Your author notes. Don't a lot of them turn out to be the total opposite of what we always saw. Sad.
This is so beautiful though. They wound us daily with the few times they ignore us and talk as though we are not there...
Well written and effective, welcome to the site
Faerie
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Thanks to you all
Yeah it did need work, yet I like it even more now, glad you liked the themes your all so kind, of course your all welcome to share some wisdom on my latter works in fact i would be priviliged (It is one of my first poems many years ago) since I dont get to place much new stuff considering my keyboard is hell bent on dying (have to copy and paste certain letters, it takes me ages....) So thanks Again And So merry muse to the future..... JAs -
A very creative entry I wish you luck in the New Members Contest... I think many can relate to this.
Also, Welcome to AllPoetry, if you ever need something commented on, please send me the link and I will stop by and try to give you a helpful comment!
Best wishes,
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Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!
This is a pretty intense and deep poem, the flow was great and I enjoyed the read very much, a little typo: ((Did you beauty so bright)) I think maybe you meant to put ((your)). Loved the poem, keep them coming Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to Allpoetry 
Dove
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thanks
thanks for sharing this with us here for the contest..
I liked the subject matter and thought it had a good flow,, just a couple of grammer errors in there.. but over all well done!!
good luck to you in this and welcome to the site...
Krystal
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Thanks for enterring
In your first line it seems you intended the word "shining" rather than shinning. Those first loves can be quite dissillusioning, no? I think you have written a poem that most of us can relate to when thinking back to "firsts"
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Thanks for entering
Well, I think it could benefit from some editing. Maybe if you make the lines more uniform it would add to it. Very intense though a little contradictory.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry.
God Bless
Tammy
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