Someplace
On a distant shore,
Faraway
Someone cries out.
Beckoning
Away, far too empty,
Alone
“Where are you!?”
“Right here
On a distant shore, Away, far too empty
So Alone
And wondering who you might be.”
A contest entry
- For Those Poets Who Have Never Won A Trophy Before by wings of an angel.
525 points, ended February 26, 2007, 17 entries
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Poor Lonely Souls
I love poems like this one. I like the idea of someone who's lonely and void of anyone like him, but there's someone else exactly like him with the same predicament. If the two would find each other, the problem would end. The poem could be understood as a love poem, but also as other things. Sometimes I have a longing for the friends I grew up with who live in another state. This poem reminds me of them, as well. I suppose I love my friends, but I don't think that's quite the same type of love...
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Awesome
Reminds me of the time I was on a beach in Northern Bay ,NL when one night when it was pitch black out and I climbed out of my tent and saw the moon in a way I had never seen it before, it was so blue and it lit up the ocean like the sun.
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i like the meaning and the whole thing of the poem alot, i just like it really. i never find anything bad idk i like the whole thing together.
peacee -
Yeah, I can see this. Thinking you are alone, but there si always someone out there. Nice flow.
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The message i hear tells me no matter what we are never truly alone on the opposite side of the world someone ponders the same feeling....This a simple poem but works with a powerful punch .You have not overworked you words or cluttered them with those annoying little ones...a very well crafted poem. Thank you for the pleasure of the read.
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dude yeah i see how it relates to my poem you commented on the message of aloneless is evetently clear through out the piece you got the same message out of the picture i got
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“Right here
On a distant shore, Away, far too empty
So Alone
And wondering who you might be.”
beautifully written and extremely powerful... its a very thought provoking piece...
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Thank you for your comment for "On a distant shore." I appreciate you having read it.
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I liked this. The idea that you're never alone - always seems there's someone out there feeling the same feelings and doing the same actions you are ... wondering where that someone is so they can console each other good write
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Thank-you for the comment, yeah this poem reflects that longing to connect to the person who will understand you and is longing to find someone just like you, but is so far away.
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This poem is so free spirited and gentle like the waves that touch both shores. I love the gentle longing in this poem and the deep meaning here
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From your work I've read so far this one has stood out. Partially because I love free verse, but mainly because you used it so affectively. It says a lot without being too verbose. Also, the repetition was used well, something hard to pull off.
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Wow
Beautiful imagery and sense of longing. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing -
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Thank you for stopping by to read this, glad you liked it.
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