Here goes nothing as I dive into the ocean
I have drown too many times to count, but, what is life with out death?
Seen too much and heard too much
The doctors say I'm crazy and need some help.
Too much, too little, is wasted on all our breaths
The ghosts watch over me like the angles do;
But what is life without a little fun?
What's it like without a little muse.
So this is what happens when you fall down
And no one is there to pick you up.
I lay in the deep snow thinking to myself
I think I'll just stay here; I will be fine
The snow will melt away and so will I;
They will find me in the morning
Blue, as I can get; I'm numb with satisfaction
That I finished my live the way
It was supposed to be lived.
You can judge me if you like; call me names
Because there is nothing more that I can do
It was this way; I lived
It was this way finished.
Author notes
(first thise poem was writen a long time befor this date)
this is about the life and death boundrys
. Think...this person I wrote about has had a sad life almost everyone died of who they love thire life turend around and they begain to live so much that it mad people mad and fearfull of them when this person died in the snow it was fine because they died happy and free althow people said that they needed help and then got some it was not for them so they lived life to thire own book
Live life, Die happy"
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thank you for entering.
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Sad and emotional....lovely words and great expression! Best of luck in the contest.
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Really great write! Thank you very much for entering it into my contest! I appreciate it a lot! Rock on! xoxo meg
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Life is to be lived and how we life is up to us
we are free to be who we want we have dreams and goals I see where your words are leading me and the profound thoughts I am thinking which arise in my mind from yours. thank you for the pleasure of this read...you got my im so got conquer the world
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good write but with several misspellings..too neney(many)moring(morning)sopost(supposed),,i don't think drounded is a word either...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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Thanks for a good read. As time is lacking, I will limit comments to allow more reading time. Thanks for your entry.
Peace, Rob -
Wonderfully written
So this is what happens when fall down and no one is there to pick us up
I lay in the deep snow thinking to myself I think I'll just stay here
I will be fine the snow will melt away and so will I
I love these lines in this poem, they spoke to me, and I identified with them, as I identified with this entire poem. You did a wonderful job. -
Well, this is sad that is true. Honestly you have a good idea here but there are a lot of spelling typos in your author's comments and in the poem. You might need to run it through spell check. The idea behind your poem is worth exploring more fully. Good luck.
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