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~ Her tears-by the way of the run of her cheek do fall, they pave the way for the day for her dreams to be realized in Him, and as she cries, so-she-weeps. Softly casting-
her hopes, and only sorrow upon the quiet-whispering of-the-wind. ~
~ For to be told the willing heart she has always been known by God to be; no
sweeter of a love for-Him-to-treasure. As amid the answer of the soothing breezes, they gently caress her a she quietly lies down midst the tears so wanted and shed for the love of the ones she beholds, so dear, and waiting; within the joy of the Heavens. Lives the wisdom of God, her Lord ... Jesus. For each tear she has wept so foretold they were already in His heart this beauty ... envisioned, and being shed they were shed for His life one-freely-given, and with each breath she takes. She knows, with-His-love, one given, and given for all with a hopeful condition, and so to speak ...
she speaks aloud to Him now a grateful thank-you. As overwhelmed in all her
honest emotion, tenderly for Him, she weeps. ~
~ Yes she weeps. As she willingly hopes, and prays to Him, tenderly and honestly. For all the sick and hurting ... the broken that still do-not-know this gentle-soul so- open. Who-came-to-save, the broken heart found to be cold and alone, and-ever-deeper in fear, and crying out silently inside. ~
~ The-lost-one, of His faithful bride. Now amiss of the tenderness of those fonder days of youthful innocence. The ones that have been made certain in this, and have all but given up searching. As deep within, driven by God the remembrance of those honest days. Have-been-brought, to a quiet hush. ~
~ Yes those sweeter days when to be open their care was free; their thriving Hope, but-some-angry-wind-within, came and stole its even-pride and carried-it-upon its-way, and the tears rarely fall down now anymore, but when they do come ... they
fall as just a trickle. As-they-have but-all-dried-up-and the body has gotten stuck
and-stiffened. The heart barely-beating-now cry's out a louder and louder help,
me out of the dark, because so cold here, I am freezing, dying-to-be warm,
hungering- for-love a new life, honest-answer rescued and freed, forever-
awakened from the prison ... of my bewilderment, and yes, ever-aware for their-comfort and mending, innocence, completion, the return of their
open hope and the Joy of their certain freedom. In an even-greater
and greater faith in Him. So compelled
by this for them, she weeps to Jesus. ~
~ For Him to come, reign, in their hearts forevermore, and reestablish them. Yes to their once mighty position, of faith in Him, the faith, that when granted through His compassion, and ever loving Spirit, would come to echo in the sweet promotion of their peace, and her tears to be known. Are being heard by Him still today,
and have served to weigh heavily on Gods ear. ~
~ As her tears have convinced Him to convict and bring me to Him, and-I-know-God-now ... He is faithful, to her open heart; to the ever, faithful soul of her precious tears, and now, so am I, because free today. Here I am and weeping too, to Him, because of His compassion given, shown to me ... ! As I am overwhelmed in all
my gratitude, and because my Lord, God Jesus. He heard me, even though,
I could, just barely, cry. ~
~ He cried for me, and so yes as well, He saw her crying there; full of her tears and honest prayers, to Jesus for me, and the sweet fact, that somebody actually cares, and understands, cares-just-enough, to ask God to find and hold up and bring my hope back for me. I am eternally grateful to Him. For His Love and because tenderly, for Him, and for the many, and the few like me and for you. I know, still, she can be found there. Until the time He comes again. ~
~ Yes until then, she prays for peace for all, and a true freedom in Him. Yes for all
the sick and tired, the broken, and still faintly Hoping. That still carry the desire, to be forever open. As forever moved by this. To the Hope for all the world, to The Lord Jesus, in complete abandon to Him. Willingly, and for a sweet release in Him. For all, under-the-cool-winds of peace, their-blanket of warmth, tenderly, she weeps. ~
~ Dedicated to My loving Wife Gigi, and all those Like her... ~
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~ " The prayer of faith will save the sick, and the Lord will raise him up. " ~
~ James 5:15 (New King James Version) ~
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~ May freedom come and find you well,
shelter-you deliver ... be the hope-you carry,
mercy, you-shower upon-another ... your-
ambition for this an open-welcome for
another of-peace ... ~
~ James ~
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Author notes
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~ This woman was my wife and saved my life... and all those like her... ~
" Christmas Cheer " #1
" Christmas Cheer " #2
Kicked out of contest for this reason...
Judge Says
Beautiful poem. I don't think it really fits my contest. Please read the what kind of poems I would like entered. I think it fits the other contests you've entered better. I did like it though.
~Dommi
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A contest entry
- My Best Friend by DarknessOfSanity.
900 points, ended November 20, 2008, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How did it make you feel? What could I have done differently?
Comments
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An excellent write/tribute.
Thank you for sharing this.
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it's beautiful and the sentiments
touch the heart....
because of your author's question,
I would recommend you split
this into two poems...
or
break up the lines
to help the flow not overwhelm;
So we may stop and rest upon
each line and enjoy the beautiful verses within.
sometimes, I too...
have rushing waterfalls of thoughts flood from my pen.
I have listened wisely to many poets who teach control.
So that each word and tender imagery is not lost
within sentences structured too tightly together.
You have a beautiful and rich soul James,
I am always grateful to read your poetry!
ears/Seattle
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This is a heartfelt and touching write here. Thanks for sharing it and for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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This took forever to read. I don't really like parapgraphs
but it held my attetnion.
Thanks for entering!
Mylee and Alex -
I have to agree with Tim. Very nice write. You poured your heart out in this one. ~Sie
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Wow
So beautifully inscribed my friend.
Some really good work here, as you pen your heart.
Peace, Timothy
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You shared a part of your heart so beautifully, i was touched by this wonderful writting of yours, my best to you!!!
Rena~
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Thank you for sharing your time and muse.
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wow
i like this poem you put a lot of feeling in this. i really do like this. good luck in the contest. -
I couldn't help myself. I read this from beginning to end more than once. This just painted such wonderful images within and the way my mind seemed to grasp at your words and the savory delights that fed my hungry soul made this a literary feast that appeared meant for me alone. There are times when my mind hungers for something of value to grasp, something beyond the ordinary and mundane dribble... this certainly did it for me. The imagery is just awestriking! From the first line I was kept intrigued. Each that followed just drew me in deeper. To be honest I didn't want this one to end. Bravo!
♥ Touchof1der -
Oh wow.. what can I say.. yes it was a very long read but sometimes thoseare the ones that you cannot find the words to say how you feel about it.. And thats a good thing.
I really liked this piece..Great write my friend..
Peace to you,
Jetleena
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Thank you for your entry. Keep an eye out. I am judging soon.
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Woah, this is a very ineresting piece. Some beautiful poetic lines, but for me it's just too long and that's a shame because I suspect you may lose someof your (deserved) audience simply through that. But good luck!
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Judge Says
Beautiful poem. I don't think it really fits my contest. Please read the what kind of poems I would like entered. I think it fits the other contests you've entered better. I did like it though.
~Dommi -
a lovely write. and wow you entered a lot of contests! lol
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such a lovely entry and filled with love. success in this contest.
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The lost one, of His faithful bride. Now amiss of the tenderness of those fonder days of youthful innocence.
these are the things that we all feel.
it shows of love that he dont care about.
it shows everything and more, of once was or once has.
this is a great poem.
keep up the good work.
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Good xmas write, very deep and emotional. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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Poetic Hint
I am the very same male
That was the pride of my Dad
First born sons are not for sale
Made me secure as a lad
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This piece renews my faith in the power of prayer, that maybe, just maybe, something is happening even though I'm not immediately cognizant of it. Your works always have such beautiful messages of hope in them.
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James; I don't know what to say, I don't understand why this poem didn't win some of the contests that you entered it in. The only reason that I can think of is that the judges didn't take the time to read in between the lines. This poem is special as you mentioned when you so kindly let me read it. It not only shows great writing skill but it shows me who "James" is, your love and your compassion. I couldn't help while I was reading this but to think of the Bible verse; John 11:35. Thank you for letting in to see you.
Love,
Amera♥
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Verbose
There is no doubt that the Virgin wept. I prefer to believe that tears of happiness and humility were the primary reasons for the flow...Wrong is spelled without an e
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Excellent view of God and his wonders and blessings for all
And to help show us we are the ones to carry his love on and in doing so find the peace and the love we are ment to have . Embrace life and love and in doing so with respect and the knowing they are a part of your soul no man or woman would ever be without the love they so deserve .Its in the leaving one out is where pain takes its place i rate this a 5 -
I thought that this was a very interesting piece. It was a bit long for my tastes, and, unfortunately, I had trouble keeping my attention on the piece. I also thought that maybe you could cut a couple of the longer paragraphs into smaller ones to help the flow, but that's just my opinion. Your word choice could have been a bit better, too, but it was still an okay piece.
Good luck and thanks for entering my contest!! -
Beautiful! "As her tears, have convinced Him to convict and bring me to Him, and I know God now. He is faithful, to her open heart. " favorite lines right there! I am near to speechless! wonderful job and good luck in the contest!
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A lovely write. Poignant. Deep expression of emotion. Prayerful. Very good word choice. Nice alliteration. You express beautifully the power of prayer. Well done.
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Beautifully Touching
I am not one for putting much stock into God, but i will never tell someone what to do to make themselves feel right. By now you should have my revision of this piece in your email in-box.
Outside of my personal beliefs, this was a very emotional and heart wrenching piece. In a sense, it makes me smile to think that there's love like this out there, as it is something I have never known. This piece definitely makes the reader want to believe in something better.
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James, another wonderfully done write! It is strong and loving. My suggestions for this piece would include less use of conjunctives and more line breaks to make for easier reading. The beauty and power in these lines is excellent!
~Lori
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This made me feel better. Thanx for writing it.
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i suck at punctuation but i loved this poem, it almost makes me want to believe again... my favorite part of this poem probably has to be the part where you talk about conviction... it is true that he has come, but not to convict us, but to set us free.
overall this was a great write keep it up. thanks
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James
Very very touching write mate
Long, but worth the read ... and I see you included another quote I think that is gorgeous of you ...
And I am happy this special lady saved you, absolutely beautiful to read
I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
~Amanda
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