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Good to see you Again

After so many months you came back,
For Christmas leave you were there.
I didn't get to see you over break,
Why I don't know, but I didn't.
Then on that day,
The first day back at school
You came to visit.
Coming up from lunch,
I saw you in the halls,
You saw me and smiled widely,
Engulfed me in a hug.
If you'd seen me throughout the day,
After she told you'd be there,
A smile was irreplaceable.

Then the time came,

To say goodbye once again.

One last hug and then time to leave.

I walked back to the school,

Where I waited for my mom,

And as I waited I thought about seeing you again.
I never seriously knew how much you meant,
Until you had to leave again.
The second time you had to leave,
Was a feeling different from the first.
But as you said,
You'll soon be close,
Close enough to come on weekends,
Those weekends I'll look forward to,
Those weekends we'll be three again,
You, her, and me.

Author notes

One of my closests friends had leave over Christmas and last week I got to see him. It was wonderful.

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  • March 25, 2007

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    I am new to this site and I'm not sure how to go about giving a review. I can only tell you that if this was my poem, I would edit and rewrite, you have a great topic and a sound base, but for me it reads like you weren't sure about what you REALLY want to say, almost as if you are holding your feelings back.


  • tawk gold member
    February 18, 2007

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    It is so hard when a friend leaves. Your write is so full of emotion and love for this person. Good luck in my contest


  • Pollycheck
    January 27, 2007

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    You never cease to amaze me the way you capture the essence of the serviceman. Thank you from a veteran that loves reading your work.

  • Mother Angst
    January 12, 2007
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    wonderful

    this poem is sad and hopeful all at one time. iys a great poem!


  • sunny day
    January 12, 2007

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    AG, It sounds like your friend is very lucky to have someone like you in his life and that he knows it. You didn't get all mushy and that does not matter, I felt what you had in your heart from the words I read. We all need close friends in life and you showed this from the title right to the closing line in your work. I want to thank you for sharing this with all of us and I hope your friend gets to see it also. You have a standing ovation from me to go along with my applause. Love and God bless, Joyce


  • Firequeen
    January 12, 2007

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    I really liked this
    something so honest and true about it
    nothing better then just saying what you think
    Fire


  • freespirit51
    January 11, 2007

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    Not sure if your trying to tell a story or poem. There are no emoting, feelings or images in your words. I think you might need more work. You have a good base for a great poem, just add the emothions.


  • Dygurl
    January 9, 2007

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    hmm i think you could put ALOT more emotoin here. its a good story, but it's not very poetic. Try to put some emotoin and it will make it alot more personal.

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