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~ Parasitic Perception ~

 



A pesky little mosquito

of self righteousness bites

with hypocritical blood sucking beak

buzzes with narrow-mindedness

flying in a no fly zone

Rotted fruit perception

spreads gangrene infections

A single tiny prick injects

innocence with malaria

An annoying tyrant

force-feeds naïve minds

grounded fertilizer

by the bucket full

Biased opinions served daily

with a side order of chilled malice

Just a petty parasite feasting

on the mental freedom of others

Heated animosity

stirred to a bittered perfection

seeping in whispers

tainting cerebral cortex

with obscured judgments

Damned life sucking leeches

procreating through vile greed

of singular rail car

racing down one-way street

of comprehension

laying waste to individual views


Author notes

"flowing red embers"



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  • Ryno
    July 31, 2007

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    Wonderful work with the metaphor... I thought that where you used the word "perception" you could've maybe used something else sense you already have it in the title Other then that there was some great wording. Excellent piece.


  • freebutsafe
    July 31, 2007
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    Excellent vocabulary! Great piece of work here! Well done and good luck in the contest!


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 26, 2007
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    Now ain't this the truth!!! :)) This is absolutely fabulous! I love the metaphor as well as the reality of the insects themsevles. Humans are not so evolved as they like to believe are they? :)) Powerfully done! Best of luck to you.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 26, 2007
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    Now ain't this the truth!!! :)) This is absolutely fabulous! I love the metaphor as well as the reality of the insects themsevles. Humans are not so evolved as they like to believe are they? :)) Powerfully done! Best of luck to you.


  • Welcome-To-Hell
    February 22, 2007
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    This is full of animosity anger and rage you must have been truely pissed off when you wrote this and it obviously just flowed out of you through your pen excellently written best of luck to you in the contest


  • Through Your Iris
    February 20, 2007
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    dark

    Great imagery and complex words in this poem. Loved the metaphors that were strewn in this piece. For me though, it seemed like at times that the complexity of the words tended to confuse the message you were trying to impose. Great job and good luck!


  • ProjectBLACKROSE
    February 14, 2007
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    cool poem

    I may have some competition in the contest after all, lol.


  • Gasp
    February 14, 2007
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    this is a good poem, my god i hate mosiquitoes lol...

    thx for entering

    ~marin~


  • leander Moderators member
    February 10, 2007
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    Anger management?
    am I glad I wasn't standing right next to you when you were writing this one cause dang... I think you'd probably devoured me
    Strong and very powerful poem you have written here - great and wonderful job


  • MadisonRae
    February 4, 2007
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    mosquitos suck. literally. anyway, haven taken this piece metaphorically i loved the idea. i can't say i know very many people like that, but i'm sure they're out there. The picture is very intense and it adds to the piece perfectly. Thank you for entering

    Madison


  • luckynsincere
    January 10, 2007
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    WOW! VERY POWERFUL MY SWEET SIS! i LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!
    MEL


  • SorrowWithoutWords
    January 9, 2007
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    COMPLETELY AWESOME FREE WRITE!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT! ughh you make my skin crawl when i read this....aghhh its just whoa. chock full of imagery! this is awesome. i really enjoyed this and i usually don't enjoy freewrites that much but this one you kept me hangin on! great job!
    ~Sorrow~


  • Blazing White Wolf
    January 9, 2007

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    I have to agree very strong and powerful piece on the poor state of mind that society as a whole carries. Again nice use of imagery, aliteration, and metaphor tto scribe home your point. Well done, My lioness

    Love,
    Master


  • B Chandler
    January 9, 2007
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    This is seriously a strong write filled with imaginery. Keep it coming

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