Flaming bird, controlling the sun so bright!
Will I see at all tonight?
Flaming bird, hiding in the clouds so high.
I cant even see you passing by.
Flaming bird, flying like a flame in the sky.
When I see you tears drop from my face,
and I say "good bye".
Author notes
This bird is so cool
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So glad to see your fine poem here. Love it!
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Ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!! A flaming bird is such a wonderful idea and the title looks so dramatic!
Like this poem, sure! 
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very good
Wow Angelo this is cool indeed. Well imaged. Be assured, bro. When the flaming bird sees you shed tears as it departs, it comes back, sits on your shoulder and says with comfort, 'Your joyful tears are a sign of your love for me, my friend. A better gift I could never receive.' Great job, bro.
Brian
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Thanks!!!! but the faming is bigger than my shoulder!!!!
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this is so cool keep it up !!
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