Am no longer broken
Yet still confused
Still scared of this world
That still tears me apart
No longer foolish to be tricked by love
Yet still lost with nowhere to go
Broken am not
With bloody tears I still cry
Still confused on whether
You love me or not
No longer shivering
Of what we've come to be
Yet still confused on what we should or shouldn’t be
Time is something
We haven’t really spent
Rather talk to me
Or go to sleep
Confused I am
Bloody tears I do not cry
Confused on whether
I love you or not
Tired of these games
Am not going to be played
Tricked by you
Tricked by the world
So lost...
Author notes
OPTION 1:
give me a poem of love, like strong love, weak love, love that is not shown back, love that is recieved but you cannot give back... just love
A contest entry
- round contest #3 (anything) by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended May 7, 2008, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - so..how about the bronze winners now? by Cat10.
600 points, ended June 2, 2008, 31 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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thank you for entering! this is a great poem! just what I like to read! you did a wonderful job, good luck in the contest!
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Love, one of the biggest confusions in life and a beauty when it's shared between two.
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This is a amazing write. I really like this one. It's writen so perfectly. Great job.
Thanks for entering.
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wow, this is deep, and i really like the last stanza... it showed a lot of emotion within it. and it gave what i asked for, so good job!
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I love the follow-up poem. good luck in my contest
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I'd like to see more contrast between your background and font. This was difficult to read. Thanks for entering.
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Wow somehow this was better then the forst one. Haha I like that you had two parts because it would be really long if it was one whole thing! But great job it again was really sad. It had a lot of emotion in it and that is what makes a poem great. I love this piece!! Wonderful job!
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really? most people tell me they like the st one more, but i like this one better to.. thanks =)
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really this one is way better well no, not way better but better!
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lolz that was like a mixed compliment, thank you =p
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welcome
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i love this so much. im sorry you were hurt this way. thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Very painful write, and yet, I can understand how you feel, I think, with some similar pain. Thanks for these deep thoughts and your entry.
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Is there a part 3, cause you ended it with...it just makes me curious if there was a part three. Liked this poem a lot. Great work. Liked this part:
Confused I am
Bloody tears I do not cry
Confused on whether
I love you or not
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hehehe..yes there actually is a part three never thought of putting it up i didnt want it to sound as if it was a repeat so i never did..
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Good write. Some really deep emotion and you portrayed them well. Thanks for entering.
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