cliches are
nasty little buggers
insulting intelligence and bring
real poets to the madness
of Dracula's Renfield.
Hellacious interest in you brings
ripened thoughts
insidious language unsuitable
for infants.
they claw at the pencil
pasted to my forefinger and thumb
erasers worn to the nub require
a trip to the grocery to buy
add-ons.
the tigress paces
breezes so brisk the
cacti rock almost to break
i'll come with you to the desolate
tract of land
invading your mainframe
not allowing inventive
ideas to flood
then our inspirations penetrate
and
our write brains
take over once again
A contest entry
- Looking for an AP wife (21 and older only) by J Rhys Davies.
310 points, ended January 23, 2007, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Winter's Best - Top Ten contest. by Kiusha.
4000 points, ended July 15, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I totally dig this. You definitely get points for being incredibly unique, that’s a certainty. I love the “write brains” part. Nice play on words and then some. You really have done a number on me with this entry.
I apologize for the delay is commenting. I have read each entry about 50 dozen times because each one is making my decision making ability a near impossible feat.
John
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well what kind of virus are you fighting off, Great read well done
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I also really liked the words you use,d they were very imaginative. I like the style of it too. Very good word choice.
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I enjoyed this very much because of its vivid and unusual images, the interesting alliteration, and the play on words. well done.
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I'm not sure whether your trying to seduce the reader to gather you in or if your showing your worth just to say forget it "I won't come" lol
well done peice
~~Starr~~ -
Oh so true. Cliches are so common among us writers and we live in a frantic attempt to avoid them and create such meaning out of lives and thoughts and emotions. I can relate so well, I think we all can. Thanks for sharing.
-mandy -
NICELY DONE!
AWESOME VOCABULARY YOU HAVE PENNED HERE. GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST!
KEEP ON PENNING
POETDONTKNOWIT -
What is a metta for? Now I know. Very clever and deserves to win.
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Excellent
I am somewhat jealous of your talent my friend. beautifully written. Best to you in the contest.
Peace
Jeri
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