As you like it sir
As you like it
All to your liking
And no-one else’s
Especially not mine, never mine sir
So, as you like it sir
As you like it
I won’t fight
Not in an obvious way of course
I’ll quietly rebel, so you can’t blame me
But still feel the anger you so often feel
Isn’t it funny?
How I can rile you so easily?
Are you jealous of me sir?
Or are you just a bitter old man?
As you say I’ll be silent
But don’t expect my love
You don’t deserve it so don’t ask
No matter how much you’d like it... Sir
As you ask I’ll clean the house
But as a slave, I’ll do it grudgingly
Not with a smile as you’d like
As you shout I’ll be afraid
But you don’t want that, its just natural
When an ogre shouts the peasants cower
But I am a princess among peasants
And you in your blindness don’t see
As you like I’ll let you pander to me
I don’t need it, but you do
You aren’t useful otherwise
You need something to do
As you like I’ll slam the doors and fight back
Give you reason to shout
To fill your time
As you like I’ll be awkward
You pretend you don’t like it
But if I wasn’t you’d have no reason to bully me
And then when you did I’d have reason to complain
You wouldn’t like that
So as you like it sir
As you like it
I won’t fight
I won’t cry
No tears will come from my eyes
Not for you,
Not even when you die
And I’ll rebel
But you won’t know
And you won’t be able to blame me
And I hope you know by now
You’ll never have my respect either
Author notes
Got mad at my stepdad.
A contest entry
- tear me open at the seams. (pretty prewrites part deux) ♥ by noir eyes.
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As I said earlier on, this would benefit from some punctuation being put in, A few more stanza breaks would also make it a lot easier on the eyes.
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I really can't imagine what your going through because my mom hasn't gotten remarried. Your piece relates to so many people and this is the only poem talking about a step parent so this one really stands out to me. I felt your pain and your mercy in this piece and it just makes you tear up. Great Write and Thank you for entering. Best of luck!
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Well I cna say that I know how you feel but that is not a good thing and I am truly sorry for you having to go through this. It is not right for any kid to ever have to feel like that when it came to their stepdad. I know how you feel in a way. It is mainly my real dad that I feel like this but it is also my boyfriend that makes me feel this way as well.
You did a great job, and keep up the writing!
Felicity
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parents can pretty much suck sometimes. this is a unique poem & i definatley liked it a lot.
thanks for entering my contest & good luck! -
I like the rebellion in this, even if it's a teeny bit (I hope you don't mind) emo-ish. I'm one for rebellion myself, though I'm more of an armchair anarchist. The end of this, though REALLY harsh, worked quite well.
One thing this did lack was punctuation, but as with everyone I accept that this is a personal choice.
This is nice.
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