The universe and me
Settling down for tea
To talk around the sun and stars
Not ev'rything is free
They're hung up there you see
With strings from Jupiter to Mars
The conversation ends
Between the lifelong friends
We go our separated ways
So long to wait for bends
And appetising trends
For universe and me, such days!
Author notes
Written on 9th January 2007 at 13:24 GMT
And yes, that is supposed to be 'separated'. 
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A contest entry
- Short Particular Measure (SPM Form) by Samplette.
600 points, ended January 10, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This write sounds like it's about a person who likes any topic in question, and with the mention of the universe, a free spirited person, very nice indeed.
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interesting
well this is a very different piece. but wonderfully written. keep up the good work for the new year -
Sometimes I worry about you, Laura.. Though, I must say that your first piece of the year is very different to that which I have read so far. It is rare for you to write something so.. spacy and weird! Wonderful, yet beautifully strange..
Yours in question!
Kain
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definitely a trophy winner!!!!
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Nicely done. Thank you for entering the contest. Great job.
Sam
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This is quite impressive Laura.
I got the feel of universal freedoms
within conversations held..
Kind of peaceful too.
Great write here..
Jeffro
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i liked this & your new pic
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I really enjoyed reading this piece. It is a bit weird (as you put in your category choices!) but I really loved it. Good work!
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