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Icarus Complex


picture by Scorpioeclipse at deviantart.com

addicted to the light
drawn magnetically to the

knows better than
 

inexplicably compelled to throw

self against brilliance
 
the zzzzzt zzzzt smell eventually becomes fragrant
 
eau de scorched dreams
oblivious to mangy faded wings
 

flying things are immune to
aversion training
delusion paints pain with Pavlov's belltones
 
stars in the eyes turned bright enough

to blind


like a shot of bad boy

never innoculates
 
call it an Icarus Complex
  
lacking the synaps that discerns between

warmth and burning
only hope is combustion intervention
  
confined forever in the dark

subsistance existance

better than none
little lights on the back of closed eyelids
 

the methodone

Author notes

This picture put me in mind of moths drawn irresistably to the flame. This is DK. I used Fairy Lantern, and I commented on Houdini
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2523088
by Whispered Devotions, so far. will be doing others also.

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  • PerVirtuous
    November 24, 2008

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    Just wondering whatever came of the enormous ego that used to keep mine company here in the great expanse.


    • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
      January 23
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      humility

      lol! hello my friend! thanks 4 stopping by!
      love from the lunatic


      • PerVirtuous
        January 23
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        Come to think of it, I have heard of the Oedipus Complex but this is the first time I have ever heard of the Icarus Complex. Could you tell me what sexual deviation this represents? I am shopping for a new one...


  • ApollosMuse
    March 13, 2008
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    i love your work....you are definitely one of my favorite poets on here!


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    August 30, 2007

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    excellent~

    What a read sweetie...
    I enjoyed this read so much...and wow
    What imagery..
    Incredible...and catches you on the edge of your seat to the very end...
    Congrats to you on the silver trophy...
    I already thought you were on my favs...but am adding you now...
    Do hope you come visit me...
    Here is hoping you have a great Thurdsay....
    P S I love your home page...so very colorful
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • Raazi
    August 17, 2007

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    What an exquisite piece of poetry, Diana. These days I've found myself looking at poems more critically, but I swear I can't criticize anything here..except for the fact that maybe it was a bit too complicated at places. But well, I loved it!


  • nichtmich silver member
    April 3, 2007
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    A Masterpiece

    Wonderful metaphor and fluid language. You never cease to delight and entertain. I think some of us are blessed with the ability to never grow up or ever learn. "eau de scorched wings" makes me smile and "stars in the eyes turned bright enough to blind" is beautiful. Kudos to you and that sensational Silver Trophy!


  • Amera gold member
    January 31, 2007

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    The Icarus Complex (sounds like a Robert Ludlum novel) This is fantastic, friend, (I almost said your name, I didn’t notice the contest) you are a poetry machine. The more I read you the better I get with my own feeble attempts at verse. Your work “always” brings a smile to my face.
    Love, Amera


  • Whispered Devotions
    January 15, 2007

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    Gorgeous

    This is one of my favorites so far. I am a little envious lol, and intimidated with this talented write. I wrote an entry for this picture as well with a theme of being magnatized to the light as a metaphor for life and temptation. the moth to the light seems to be a pleasing idea for this beautiful picture. I am afraid I do not have any critical reviews for this because I thought it was great already and doesnt need changed.


    Amy


  • deadcolor dreams
    January 13, 2007

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    I loved this. Especially because it actually reflected the meaning of the picture when I created it. I had used the 'moth to flame' concept, to create this unskillfully rendered collection of junk, but I'm glad you got the same idea from it. It means I did something right.

    Poem wise, I love the imagery. 'Icarus complex'... sheer brilliance, right there. I love it. I've always been into mythology, so this reference excited me. VERY good job. out of 50, this is a 47.

    Thank you, and good luck.
    ~Lindsay


  • ObsidianEntity
    January 12, 2007

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    This is a very interesting write, it has very good imagery and is a nice interpretation of the picture.

    In my eyes/mind () I feel that the first 3 lines are incomplete, they seem to drift off their point into nothingness and then reappear as a new one. This really confused me, and no matter how many times I read it over, I can't make sense of it. I'm not sure whether the first 3 lines were intended to be like that or not, but it just reads kind of awkwardly. If it is intentional and it makes sense to you and some other people, then maybe I'm reading it differently than everybody else or completely missing the point lol.

    Moving on to a nicer point, the rest of the poem, I think, is great. The structure is interesting and it flows much better than in the beginning.

    Also, there is no punctuation to reflect the reading, I doubt anyone can read the whole thing without taking a breath. I don't think it needs full stops as such, I just think it needs a few commas here and there. I won't say where though because it will take ages lol, and its quite easy to see where they are needed. But again, it could also be intentional, the comment's there if it wasn't.

    I especially like the lines:

    lacking the synaps that discerns between
    warmth and burning
    only hope is combustion intervention

    I find them the most intriguing and I feel they are the best lines, probably due to the words; 'warmth and burning', which in turn maybe due to the fact that I love fire!

    While I'm on the subject of words, I love the ones you have used and the way you have put them all together. It's nice to see some original and different words instead of the usual same old few.

    Overall, I love the imagery, love the words and I think the ideas behind the poem are great. Well written and an intriguing write.

    ~Angel~




    • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
      January 13, 2007
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      first stanza:

      addicted to the light
      drawn magnetically to the

      "knows better than"

      think of "knows better than" as a noun or metaphor for flame, once you touch it you know it burns, but you touch it again anyway. thanks for reading!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    January 9, 2007

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    lacking the synaps that discerns between

    warmth and burning
    only hope is combustion intervention


    know the feeling dear, know the feeling!

    A very interesting write my Ying.

    Roaches zapped by the light
    never were very damn bright

    tonight let's go chase the moths
    will oil rag soaked flaming cloths

    when the last die of the firefly
    is the day when Madoona becomes shy

    take care my ying and get over your cold okay>?


    JD


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    January 9, 2007
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    an enjoyable read with some wonderful imagery. The first three lines seem incomplete, but maybe that is the intent, or maybe I'm too tired this morning to grasp it lol. Overall the poem reads well and has a uniqueness to it that is refreshing. Well done.
    Rory


  • Adam Straker
    January 9, 2007
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    Ah Icarus, a warning to us all! One we always ignore.
    Some wonderful lines here esp.
    "delusion paints pain with Pavlov's belltones"
    There are points where your imagery is (Icarus) complex, and that makes this write all the more enjoyable, and one I shall no doubt return to.


  • Whenitefallz
    January 9, 2007
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    This is fan-damn-tastic.. One may deny flying too close to the sun, on many occasion, but by god the heat! Like licking the fingertip & reaching for a touch again, so are the affects of this piece.. Liking this tremendously..

  • Brugge is dood
    January 9, 2007

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    whoa

    i like this, this is a really good write, and gives a kind of point of view on being Icarus or having an Icarus Complex.. well done

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