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Love Inviolate

Which Muse doest thou invoke to hold me spellbound?

From the comforts of thy marriage bed

thou hast wooed me,

Captured my soul, within thy grappling arms

and held me bound by thy love.

 

Doest thy ambition, compare wholly with Helen of Troy?

Thou hast stolen all my kisses, with

thy garnet moist lips,

Where wholesale, my fears just disappear

within thy loving embrace.

 

How fragile be the Siren's love, with thee near?

Whose sacred trust doest thou misplay

thy husbands, mine or thine own,

How can thou knowest where thy heart lies

when shifting sheets hang-out to dry?

 

With whose burgeoning souls doeth Polyhymnia sing?

Betwixt thy limbs I desperately wish to feast

till dawn doeth shine & come again.

Thy famished passions reside within my bosom

like rain falling on desert sands.

 

For whom, doeth thy beguiling Nymphs in ecstasy reign?

Must I be laden with thy desires, to hold

their locks, weights & balance?

As thy breath doeth brush my breasts

all reserve scurries away to hide.

 

Now Erato hath plied us both with her just rewards.

Thou doeth bare my body to Dante's "Inferno"

manipulating me by designation,

My soul captured within thy spirit

carried-off to "Purgatory".

 

Gaea doeth guide the machinations of thy life!

Behold, shining beauty displayed, giveth

the world, hearts full of dare

In these moments doeth caution fade

hopes & dreams erected outside the shade.

 

Will Chronos' visit, gain me time by thy glorious side?

What thou givest me is but a trinket, next

to a life of joy fulfilled,

If but a taste of thee, be all I receive

then, ... also that, shall I accede.

 

Doeth Aphrodite, bequeath thee, mine heart?

In whose arms, doeth thy fire now ignite

burn unhindered within their realm,

Canst thou steady the embers of heaven

realign thy hearts domain?

 

Why must, thy play be done upon Apollo's field?

How doest thou remain with thy husband

while here I lay, desolate?

Doest thou saturate thy pleasure in my bed

while holding tight, his security?

 

Doeth Nostrademus inspire thy honest wanton desires?

Wherewith will I discover thy honesty

in heart, body, soul or mind,

Will Sappho rule where thou resides,

can she sustain thy hunger?

 

Now doeth Sanhedrin hold to account my words bequeathed!

Thou hast lain thy scarred heart within mine keeping,

treasured trust doeth deny social mores,

Such honour bestowed, decimates all my defences,

thy encompassing love be infinitely encrypted.

 

Is Graves willing, to re-educate the pair of us?

If our time as one has meaning of spirit

may the Goddess grant me hope!

Abroad or near, to hold thee ever closer

mine eyes fill with thy loving grace.

 

 

Author notes



I write every variation, style and form of poetry mixing new with old, never allowing society to box it in. I write from every POV and layer my works, so nothing is ever taboo. This was a poem straining its walls to be written but never felt right. Now, with my Muse's recent revisit, it became my battlecry one evening when encouraged to let it fly.

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  • OurxBeginning
    December 13, 2007
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    Sorry, but this isn't what we're looking for. Thanks regardless.


  • Knight70
    October 28, 2007

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    spellbinding imagery.....

    Now doeth Sanhedrin hold to account my words bequeathed!

    Thou hast lain thy scarred heart within mine keeping,

    treasured trust doeth deny social mores,

    Such honour bestowed, decimates all my defences,

    thy encompassing love be infinitely encrypted.



    I love the Olde English feel to this love triangle. Bravo! Knight70


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 14, 2007

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    Wow I am just at a lose for words. Don't know what to say about this one. It was just good. Wow. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • -Ink Artist-
    February 26, 2007
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    Gorgeous! Do I think it's overdone? Ever-so slightly, but that's only my personal opinion. Your style is inspirational and this must have taken some time to perfect. It's very well done!


    ~Lori


  • Lady-Pegasus
    February 24, 2007
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    Well, I for one, am certainly glad that it has been sung for I enjoyed hearing this sirens song for certain, such a feel of oldworld in thoughts of new, a true inspiration you have wrought here my friend! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *


  • oldmanriver1942
    February 20, 2007
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    this is one deep and moving piece of art

    you have reached into the depths and pulled out a masterpiece


  • ronnica
    February 19, 2007

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    This kind of poetry always takes me to another place weather reading or writing it, it is one of my loves.
    It is very bold, and some words like wholesale and famished I felt do not belong, but generally I really appreciate having the chance to read this as it is something of a rerity now, maby more will follow and everything old will be new again, Well done


  • SoulJourney
    February 19, 2007

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    Mythology, history, religion, Piers Anthony-- is there anything not in this poem? It definitely does give the impression of an overpowering love that leaves one seeing everything in relation to it. However it is very unique with its references and interesting to read. The language seems a little off to me. I guess you were mixing new and old references with new and old language styles--still I think way it is phrased really works. Good work!


  • Picnic-Lightning
    February 19, 2007

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    Nice, but not my favourite of yours--I'm not too keen on the use of old language in modern-day poetry. In moderation, perhaps, but not throughout the entire poem. The *idea* may be nice but it invariably sounds somewhat forced and pretentious. Remember that, at the time in which poets used words like "thee" and "thou," it wasn't to try and achieve anything persay, it was the way in which they spoke.

    You've expressed your feelings quite well here actually, but I just can't get past the language thing.
    Sorry to say it,
    -Nadya-


  • Andu
    January 21, 2007
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    Great classical feel in this poem, i enjoyed every line. I especially enjoyed your references to mythology and to historical accounts. You also presented a great deal of passion and emotion here, giving the poem that unique personal touch. Well done, i enjoyed it immensely.


  • Eyecberg
    January 18, 2007

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    Well done

    Bravo Starchild777. Have you counted how many different forms you used in this piece? LOL! Your imagery and alliteration are lush and the overall tone of the poem is pleasing to the ear. This is the first piece of yours that I have read and it is a dandy! I look forward to reading more of your work.

    Eyec


  • just rob gold member
    January 15, 2007

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    Fly indeed!
    Thanks for a good read. As time is lacking, I will limit comments to allow more reading time. Thanks for your entry.

    Peace, Rob


  • slipperssun gold member
    January 15, 2007

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    yeah and after all them gorgously penned words filling us full of the imagery of your work.... Did she get to keep her or is all lost between thembut whats left intheir hearts?


  • RedAquarius
    January 13, 2007
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    Minor typo in final line. Good job referencing various god/desses in proper form, a wee bit too much usage of thee, thou, for me - it could still have a nice classical feel with a few less. Overall, a nice romantic poem.


  • Heart Sutra
    January 13, 2007
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    This one definitely has the classical poetry feeling to it. Thank you for sharing your muse.

  • CrimsonCat
    January 13, 2007
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    Oh wow that’s so beautiful! The love can really be felt in this poem, it’s really touching.
    Shouldn't 'eys' in the last line be 'eyes'?
    The thees and thys really worked in the poem too. I wish I could feel like that. Good poem!

  • PalmettoSky
    January 12, 2007

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    I am amazed to read your work...Imagination is purely beautiful. Yeah and the rhyming pattern makes the poem just perfect..this is stunningly lovely.
    you are such a gifted poet..keep it up. I love and adore this poem, and I think many if not all the readers before agree that this is a very beautiful and well written and a well crafted poem. I like the rhyme and I love the alliteration. This is simply spectacular. I applaud you and I salute you for it. This poem has great imagery, so much description and details. Its incredibly good. you have terrific potential. peace to you always.


  • Madcap
    January 11, 2007
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    Simply amazing, i'm an instant fan, you really got a good thing going here, keep it up


  • manoguru
    January 11, 2007
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    very archaic, very flowery. it was interesting readinf it


  • Amera gold member
    January 11, 2007

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    I like it, your imagery is great and the flow is wonderful especially since there is transition from style to style. In the fourth stanza you ran together the words “passions and reside”. In the next stanza you misspelled ecstasy. Nice work poet. Amera


  • raggyann
    January 11, 2007
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    oh my
    this is wonderful
    a work of art
    your words flow was great
    the words you used in this poem were great
    the images i got from this poem were unblevableyou wrote as the ancient ones wrote
    great job
    loved it

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